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untittled by Mo'Kha Uzuri Wednesday, July 29, 2009 Rated "PG" by the Author. Share Print Save Become a Fan "It's still rough, I would appreciate any suggestions." JL-Mo'Kha
I used to cry for the moon half sliced and alone my eyes would glare and scorn the sun as I watched the day come undone. .. .. Stars falling from the onyx sky would cause my heart to ache resembling streaming tears, rather than chariots carrying wishes to their fate. .. .. I used to mourn the twilight as night skipped further from day confused by the plight of dusk’s diffused bite until I glimpsed the sun and moon’s embrace.
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Reviewed by Vicky Semones	8/2/2012

Hello, Mo'Kha - You have led me to your wonderful work by becoming a Fan of mine, as I am now of yours. Thank you. Because you asked: I agree with another reader that your title could easily be 'Oynx Sky'. I would use present tense, saying 'I cried', 'my eyes glared...', 'I mourned'; and begin stanza 2 with 'my heart ached' for continuity of presentation about your feelings. What a beautiful, sad, powerful, hopeful, wonderful poem. Deep Blessings, Vicky




Reviewed by Karen Palumbo	7/31/2009

A cosmic interpretation so artfully written. Why not "onyx sky" to envelop the entirety... Be always safe, Karen




Reviewed by Ronny Colanski	7/30/2009

This is a pale well worked poem.The choice of words is brilliand and the whole thing is pretty strong.I liked it a lot.You handdle words well.Great Job.




Reviewed by Edwin Hurdle	7/29/2009

Hi Jhae,welcome to the den.This is a well written poem,take care EDWIN




Reviewed by Chantilly Lace (Reader)	7/29/2009

Enjoyed..thank you..Hugss