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| Reviewed by Ian Irvine (Hobson) |
8/29/2010 |
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| This has an authentic feel, the dialogue and setting work well - and it ends with a great hook. Good tight controlled writing! |
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| Reviewed by Mary Coe |
9/22/2007 |
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| An excellent write. This was interseting reading. I like western stories. Enjoyed the read. |
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| Reviewed by Sandra Mushi |
12/28/2005 |
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You sure have gotten my attnetion, olly! This is such a great captivating write! I'm going to read more of your stories!
God bless,
Sandie. |
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| Reviewed by Lee Garrett |
6/10/2005 |
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| Overall, an impressive passage. There is an folksy charm to the stream of consciousness style narrative that makes this easy to read, creating the authentic air of the western genre. However, there is a blatant POV shift in the first appearance of the shooter. The main character shouldn't have any idea how long the ambusher has been stalking him. If he'd known he was being stalked, he'd have done something earlier to save himself from being shot. Also, the attack comes out of left field. You may have wanted this for shock value, but I think you would have gotten more milage from the use of foreshadowing instead. You could have had the rider tensing his shoulderblades inexplicably, forcing himself to relax...wondering why he had the urge to look over his shoulder. You could have used a startled flight of crows to spook him a little--an indian type of omen--he could have counted the crows in flight, wondering about the significance of their number. A few touches like these would add tension, suspense, and increase the grip you have on your readers early own until you get to the action. |
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| Reviewed by Saundra Washington D.D. |
6/8/2005 |
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| You really know how to tease the appetite. Great job. |
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| Reviewed by Sandie Angel |
3/22/2005 |
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Molly:
This is neat! The imagery comes alive! One of my uncle is a great fan of the Western. I'm sure he will like this.
Sandie Angel a.k.a. Sandie May Angel :o) |
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| Reviewed by Nordette Adams |
3/15/2005 |
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| Boy, that opening packs a wallop! And as we've all been told over and over again, catch 'em in the beginning. If you keep this up, you've got a sure winner. Great narrative style, good ear for the character's voice. You crated our vision of Travis enough in this brief opening to have us care about him so we want to know more and are concerned about his future. Way to go, madame. ~~Nordette |
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| Reviewed by Barbara Terry |
3/13/2005 |
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Molly if this is your first time with the western genre, you have done a wonderful job with just the prologue alone. I can't wait to read the book. May the Lord be with you always, and at your side constanntly. With much Love, peace, & (((HUGS))), Barbie
"If I have to...Then I may as well be." |
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| Reviewed by Dana Reed |
3/10/2005 |
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I really hope that Travis doesn't die. I really developed a liking for the boy and hope it's not going to end like Janet Leigh in Psycho. A small scene. Really good job.
Dana |
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| Reviewed by Robert Montesino |
2/22/2005 |
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| One of the many things I wanted to be when I was little was a cowboy!This little piece made me remember that dream! The writing solid & descriptive narrative right on target! Now we need to know what happen to Travis? |
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| Reviewed by Koty Lapid |
2/9/2005 |
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| I liked it. |
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| Reviewed by J. Allen Wilson |
2/3/2005 |
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This is good...you really have me going about what happens next.
Allen |
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
1/9/2005 |
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| This captures the attention. Well done. Love and peace. Regis |
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| Reviewed by A Serviceable Villain |
7/7/2004 |
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| A very entertaining story - well written! |
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| Reviewed by Fr. Kurt Messick |
6/1/2004 |
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| Reviewed by Walker Jackson (Reader) |
5/14/2004 |
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| Molly such an interesting story line. I was pulled in by this prologue. Your writing just keeps getting better and better. Your original voice is delightful. Something nice should happen for you. You are a big boost to all of us who write for the love of it and hope for a little recognition. |
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| Reviewed by Carol Chapman |
4/24/2004 |
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I could see the scene, you words painted a powerful image and the ending left me waiting and wanting more. I truly enjoyed this.
Carol
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| Reviewed by Safi Abdi |
4/23/2004 |
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Hope the shot wasn't fatal? Great story, Molly!
Safi
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| Reviewed by Dallas Franklin |
4/22/2004 |
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Well Travis seemed like a nice enough kid..why'd he have to go and shoot him!? *~;) That's what I wanna know. Great story, Molly!
Dallas
http://sellwritingonline.com
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| Reviewed by Franz Kessler |
4/19/2004 |
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| Gives a taste of the wild country. Awesome ending. Franz |
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| Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado |
4/18/2004 |
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very nice write, molly! enjoyed much!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your tx. friend, karen lynn. :D |
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| Reviewed by Mr. Ed |
4/18/2004 |
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| Vivid scene setting; and a powerful chapter ending. Enjoyed very much. |
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