by Erin Elizabeth Kelly-Moen
Friday, June 29, 2012
Rated "G" by the Author.
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Under my sprinklerís reach,
Wisps up and out and
Down again. Thunder
Rumbles mutteringly. Butterfly
Twists and lifts, seemingly
Crazily, settles on a dead flower head,
Wing-closed, enjoying the sprinkler-mist.
Thunder baritones closer. Wind whooshes
Artificial rain all over me as patched blue
Skies wink with hidden glee! Lightning stabs
Air, thunder applauds, noisily! Then, Now is
Shushed, for minutes... One last thunder, throatily
Trebles away. No monsoon yet, for arid land. Even
The butterfly has left.
Erin Elizabeth Kelly-Moen
Photo by Erin Elizabeth Kelly-Moen
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|Reviewed by John Flanagan
|Tremendous writing, Erin.
|Reviewed by Shirley Houston
|I can see this beautiful scene played out in a backyard while I absent-mindedly enjoy the dance of the butterfly! This is great!!|
|Reviewed by Ronald Hull
|Butterflies are hardy little insects that love the rain is much as we do. I hope you get the monsoon soon for there won't be food for the butterfly anymore.
|Reviewed by jude forese
|Reviewed by Lily of Lough Neagh C. Dennis-Woosley
|Butterflies, rain, thunderstorms... .what could be more lovely :)
All my favorites, I could feel it in your prose
Love and Light
|Reviewed by Budd Nelson
applause, hear the storm coming
|Reviewed by Felix Perry
|You brought the scene alive with your descriptive talent...nicely done.
|Reviewed by Roger Wayne Eberle
|...delicately deafening... ominously fragile... such juxtaposition... such an evocative study in contrasts... a poignant palimpsest of resonant images ringing with the purity of an innocent experienced eye... I echo Vivian... an impressive imagination!!|
|Reviewed by Vivian Dawson
|Such intriging imagination *Erin*
the thunder applauds, as You set
the butterfly free....
|Reviewed by Ed Matlack
|You may not be able to walk by the sea, but with one good thunderstorm with rain and such you could be alot cooler...e|