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| Reviewed by Cryssa C |
11/7/2008 |
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Wow! This is superb writing. This makes me want to weep with the rain.
Cryssa |
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| Reviewed by Lloyd Lofthouse |
8/2/2008 |
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No one wins in war and the innocent suffer most. History shows this going back thousands of years. It's all about who will dominate and tell the people, that only want to live in peace, how to live. War is not shadow boxing. For most wars, it takes two to start a fight and both are guilty. Even that mummified five thousand year old man found in Switzerland or the Italian alps after one of the glaciers melted had been murdered by an arrow wound. A recent national geographic had a piece about mummified bodies found in bogs that had been tortured and murdered. It was thought that some sort of ritual was behind it. Those that manage to live life during times of peace are fortunate.
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| Reviewed by Charlie |
7/2/2008 |
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THAT is immaculate writing... I love the repetitive word/image of rain... it patters in our minds till it's all we hear--all we see, and like the child long for reliease. Metaphors sprout in the down-pour, and they build, culminating in the fabulous last 4 lines.
Incredible display of repetitive technique --Charlie |
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| Reviewed by Abdi-Noor Mohamed (Eagle Of Hope) |
7/1/2008 |
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| This is a living pain, dear sister |
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
6/29/2008 |
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Another powerfully compelling and moving write, Safi. It very difficult to be happy when one is aware of such awful results of war. Thank you. Love and best wishes,
Regis |
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| Reviewed by amina dahir (Reader) |
6/29/2008 |
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| poetic expression of the way things are in reality, no one thinks about the victims its all about power and greed and trigger happy warring cruel factions well said, safi. |
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| Reviewed by yaseen Arne (Reader) |
6/29/2008 |
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| Truly a sad poem, how sorry iam to see such helplessness. |
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| Reviewed by Joyce Bowling |
6/29/2008 |
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Such a sad poetic tale of reality for many...captivating write dear poetess. Expressed well! Glad I stopped by, I shall return!
Blessings,
Joyce B. |
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| Reviewed by Mary Lacey |
6/29/2008 |
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So sad the tail of a soldier being mamed by this terrible war.
Excellently written
Mary |
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| Reviewed by Gene Williamson |
6/29/2008 |
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All too often the victim of national greed and hate
is the poor boy who limps on a single leg and somehow
survives on rainwater. Great poem, Safi. -gene. |
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| Reviewed by Somali Community Access Network SomaliCAN |
6/29/2008 |
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Safi,
You rightly described the impact of war on women and children. This is always the result when powerful nations unite in destroying powerless communities.
Abdullahi |
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| Reviewed by Lois Christensen |
6/29/2008 |
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| A sad poem but true poem. |
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| Reviewed by Art Sun |
6/29/2008 |
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Excellent work...the emotions of desperation and longing are exposed within your thoughts...how truly sad when children and peace are divided...and even more so when there is no peace to offer...
Truly nice work...
Art Sun... |
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| Reviewed by Mr. Ed |
6/29/2008 |
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| A truly sad story, indeed. |
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| Reviewed by Edwin Hurdle |
6/29/2008 |
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This is a very good poem
Edwin |
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