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  Of Frosted Flakes and Southern Comfort
by John DeDakis
Wednesday, November 15, 2006
Rated "G" by the Author.

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Closing up the old homestead with Dad

He was a simple man

With sweet-simple tastes:

Frosted Flakes for breakfast

Southern Comfort when it got late.

For a couple of weeks, it was just we two

With this houseful of detritus to rummage through.

He balked at forsaking his brown wooden house

On a wide macadam street with a lonely maple out front.

"Do I have to leave?" more than one time he sighed,

Then gracefully surrendered to forgetfulness – and time.

These were good-busy days, on deadline, but timeless.

We sorted, and sifted, and put sore points behind us.

"When I abandoned your dream, were you sad?  Or not?"

He smiled, shook his head, and poured one more shot.

A half century of memories, leisurely conversation,

Bookended by flakes of gold and an amber libation.

We walked familiar streets, and down by the river.

Gazed at crinkling faded photos by a cozy-crackling fire.

He retold the old stories and recalled new ones, too

Like getting drunk on Southern Comfort at the end of World War Two.

 He saw some old friends, there are now but a few.

When one tried to hug him, he awkwardly withdrew.

But later, he wept, he was given no choice

When he heard a recording of my mother's sweet voice.

It was dark and cold, car packed, ropes taut.

In the foyer, we lingered, gathering our thoughts.

We offered a brief prayer of thanks and regret

And one for the new owners unknown to us yet.

Time to leave.

Was he sad?

His answer, a sigh.

I drove down the street, and came back around,

Then inched past our house as he breathed a silent goodbye.


He now is gone, but the memories aren’t dim.


Of my dad and the home that was precious to him.


It's been years since that dusk when we drove out of sight,


Past two amber porch lights glowing in the night.


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Reviewed by Diana Wiles 4/30/2012
This is an absolute masterpiece! stirred many heartfelt memories of my own Dad...The journey you take us on is heartbreaking yet dignified of a life well-lived with love at its heart...
This is the best poem I have read for a very long of the best I have ever read. Firmly tucked away in my library...Thank you...and thanks to your dear Dad also...
Reviewed by Valerie Amor 10/28/2011
A bitter-sweeet memory retold so beautifully in your poem. Thank you John.
Reviewed by Janna Hill 9/12/2011
What a stirring recollection.
Reviewed by c lea harris 5/25/2011
so heart felt. My dad didn't get a chance to do that, they just took him, it's hard to leave the home you knew, but you have memories, to keep them and him alive. so well written and this will stay with me, for along time.
Reviewed by The Poetess 1/11/2011
Definitely a heart toucher
Reviewed by Sharon Rose 3/17/2010
This one really touched my heart. . .wonderfully.
Reviewed by Annabel Sheila 5/5/2009
Wonderful! The love you have for your father is strongly evident in this piece. Precious moments in time aren't the ones we spend doing large things, rather the quiet moments connecting with loved ones. Nice job!
Reviewed by Jerry Engler 4/3/2009
You touched me even though you frightened me for a moment that he might pour his drink over his cereal...already been amongst those who mix whiskey and coffee. I liked the write, especially in light of the recent loss of my own father...Jerry
Reviewed by Michelle Lowrie (Reader) 3/4/2009
It is such a hard thing to have to watch as our elders submit to letting of the things that they and their beloved cherished so much in order to move on and learn how to live alone again (maybe not entirely alone - just without their beloved). I also got a bit teary-eyed while reading this.

I loved the title, too.
Reviewed by Joanna Leone 8/2/2008
Memories never dim. Your memory will always be in your heart. I love your writing style, as I was able to see the faded photos in my mind, as you described the way you sat by the crackling fire. This is a very moving and touching poem. It reminds me of the stories and times that I had spent visiting with my grandfather. The simple things about a special person in our life are the things that we remember the most. I can picture the old house in my head, as you write so descriptively. Wonderful poem! Stop into my authors den if you have a chance
Reviewed by Lois Christensen 6/15/2008
He not really all gone, but is here with us in his spirit and on Father's Day this is a great tribute to write about him. It fits today and he was a great man and remembering him this way is so great of you. Back in those days, men were different than today and felt more for their families too and did more. Today eveyone is so busy, and no time for them to get together always. A great trip you took that day with your Father, and memories made for all time. Peace and love go out to you and yours.
Reviewed by Gloria Gay 4/5/2008
Beautiful original luminescent heart-wrenching.
Reviewed by Dawn Anderson 3/31/2008
Tears here. Beautiful...enough said.
Reviewed by Bernice Lakota 3/27/2008
Timeless memories of one you held/hold so dear.
Reviewed by Jennifer Lane 3/22/2008
I really enjoyed this it brought a tear to my eyes. The treasured memories of those we hold so dear remain in our hearts always where their legacy lives on.

Best wishes,

Reviewed by Victoria's Poetry & Voices of Muse 3/12/2008
Good Morning John,

I felt your memory as if it were my own, it is a sad thing letting go. Not of the House...but of the Home. It's very hard to do & for some impossible, and then for some crippling.
Ok I think I need a tissue this morning.....Memories Are Powerful & Contagious!!!

Reviewed by Janet Caldwell 3/9/2008
This brought back memories of my G-Pa & G-ma Amy (they loved Southern Comfort. See my poem Encased in Memories, it's based on them). Your writing paints such a vivid picture in my mind, it's like a tape in my head recording the scene both visually and audibly. I am visibly moved.

Reviewed by Sandra Corona 3/5/2008
Wonderous write, thanks for taking me along on the journey with your Dad. Although this is sad, to have had such a memory with my dad (he died when I was five) would have been a blessing as I would've had more time with him.

Reviewed by Susan de Vegter 2/22/2008
Sad and overwhelming with emotions of the past and, just about, anyone's future. To my bones I felt this in memory of my dear uncle and when I brought him to Savannah from his home in Cornelia.

Blessings and love to your wonderful heart.
Reviewed by Regis Auffray 2/12/2008
Memories well-shared via your verses, John. Thank you. Love and peace,

Reviewed by Anna Lisnic 2/5/2008
I liked the idea. Honestly, I think that personal poems mean more than generals one thousands of people can relate to. The poem must be YOURS. I like using 'he' and 'she' persons in poems and I often do it too. It's lovely. Yet, I found it difficult to read a poem with almost no rhytm. There were places where your metrics and rhyme were steady, but then they skipped of again. Behind it all, the message is touching in its intimacy.
Reviewed by Frances Seymour 2/4/2008
Beautiful write! blessings...Frances
Reviewed by La Belle Rouge Poetess Of The Heart 1/30/2008
Oh My, you took me there and introduced me to your special Dad. Great poem, heart touching.
Reviewed by Regina Pounds 1/29/2008
Such nostalgia, such love, such memories!

You have a way of gripping your reader's heart with simple honesty and sentiment.

Reviewed by Leann Marshall 1/24/2008
The words are lovely, the thoughts poignant--a wonderful poem.
Reviewed by ~ Holly Harbridge (Reader) 1/22/2008
Difficult to read at the moment as my own Father just passed is so short, so precious, Holly
Reviewed by Joyce Bowling 1/22/2008
A touching write filled with heart and soul of memories of your dad that will forever last a lifetime...well done!
Joyce B.
Reviewed by Chris Wright 1/17/2008
The is a real Cerealistc Poem! Keep Frosting up sweet poems.
Reviewed by Larry Lounsbury 9/15/2007
You really got me with this one. I remember my dad with his war stories, and especially how much he loved those trees in the back yard. Beautiful Poem
Reviewed by xxxx xxxx 9/15/2007
Losing a parent brings back so many memories. Helping them close a part of their lives is something you will charish for a lifetime. Heartfelt, deep emotion. Thank you for sharing this most personal time with your Dad. This poetry brings back many memories of my own Dad, also. Rhoda
Reviewed by L. Craft - Hisayasu 2/20/2007
So touching and wonderfully written. Great imagery of a part of your life that was precious. Great writing! L. K. Craft
Reviewed by Vesna Blueflame 1/16/2007
THIS is what I call a poem!
You have talent John.
I don't dare call myself a poet..LOL!
I only write thoughts that churn within my heart and soul!

I can relate to this gem of a write.
An avalanche of memories struck me as I read your words.
Thankyou John!

Reviewed by Tamela Nevins (Reader) 12/5/2006
I can relate to what the author is experiencing right now, as I am going through the same passages with my Dad. Also, I like the fact that is a good old fahioned poem. Imagery and rhyme pattern are lovely. Well done-- I was getting teary-eyed while reading it. (Thanks a lot!)
Reviewed by Mitzi Jackson 11/18/2006
Beautifully sweet
strong colorful memories

Reviewed by Chantilly Lace (Reader) 11/16/2006
Reviewed by Elizabeth Taylor (Reader) 11/15/2006
Wow. This really touches the heart.
I think death, dying, leaving could have been better planned by the Creator. It's too wrenching the way it is.

Love were a good son.

Reviewed by Kimmy Van Kooten 11/15/2006
Old homesteads, special memories shared, with the most special people of our lives, and recalling forever more...such welcomed reflections!
I love looking back!
I loved this write! And so nice to meet you, John
Love and Peace~
Reviewed by Rusty Daily 11/15/2006
This is sad and beautiful at the same time.
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