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The young girl from this portrait-art shrine
by Jennifer M Croy
Friday, August 18, 2006
Rated "PG" by the Author.
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A poem well written from me for my readers to look upon me |
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I'm a young girl of twenty-three
I came out to my garden, to admire my trees
I looked down among the white flower lilies
And smell the aroma scent, that sets me free
I wonder why, this array of garden sets upon me
A beautiful gazebo made in a shrine, for a young beautiful girl whose ruby red lips entwined
Dark black hair flowing in the wind, that shows my garden of images to me
A shrine of miracles sits upon me, at the young age of twenty-three
I smush my bare, white-silk feet upon this flowery bed, in hopes one day to be wed
A young girl of twenty-three, has hopes and dreams for you to see, so let me be and dream again
My garden gazebo is a mystery, but it lifts my soul, and brings me every woman's fantasy
To devoure every hopes and dreams for me I bend down and smell the sweet roses of pink, red, and white in my little black vase, the aroma swoons me with pure delight
My garden gazebo has my soul once again, as I dance around to a happy tune filled with love
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A young beautiful girl-artshrine
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
8/18/2006 |
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You have written a beautiful poem, Jennifer; you have shared precious meanings and sentiments. Thank you for this gift. Love and peace to you,
Regis |
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| Reviewed by Dove JoAnne Cromp (Reader) |
8/18/2006 |
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Jen, you have the talent for deep poetry..This is stunning...Your ability to write imagery is beautiful..
Peace & Love, Dove |
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| Reviewed by Joseph Wraith |
8/18/2006 |
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I'm not an educated writer or poet, I write mostly lyrics for music.
I do know that poetry needs timing and a beat just like music.
Rhyming is not as essential as maintaining a regular beat with in the verses.
If you lose the beat during the reading of the verse you lose the poem. |
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