Roses are Red
by Jennifer M Croy
Saturday, September 02, 2006
Rated "G" by the Author.
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A poem of love and beauty |
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Roses are red, and beauty runs deep
My love for you will always keep
On the highest pedstal I won't let you fall
It won't build a wall between us, nothing at all
My love for you stand's, and I love holding your hand
Love's forever and ever grand
If we should part, I won't let it be, and I'll find a way to bring you back to me
Roses are red, and love is together, We will always find each other forever and ever
I say I do and you do too no love will keep us apart, unless we drift apart
And that will never do, because I love you and you do too
Our love will shine, like a shrine, especially after we had toasted our first glass of wine
Two lovers in bliss, and never miss one last kiss
Roses are red, Beauty runs deep, our love will always keep
Even a taste of pure sweet love as I watch two doves soar above, will last a lifetime remained in love
Two lovers zoom to the sky, with bittersweet love in their eyes, and entwined forever, a love that will last forever
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Roses are red
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| Reviewed by Debbie Lacy |
2/15/2012 |
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There are many ways to decide what you feel and being that I love roses so much your poem was beautiful! Thanks for sharing it Jennifer! Blessings to you!
Debbie |
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| Reviewed by Joseph Wraith |
9/4/2006 |
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Hi Jennifer,
Your rhyming is getting better but I am not feeling the romance of the poem.
It is relying to heavily on the rhyme and not the emotion.
So it gets static and unfeeling.
Try and work on the emotional feeling from your heart
and dont worry so much about the rhyme.
If it is there it will come to you.
It should flow from you naturally and not forced.
Try to stay with a simple concept instead of putting a
bunch of lines together that rhyme
It should also keep a beat like music.
Think of beat in your head and listen to your heart.
Then write to that beat.
If you loose the beat you loose the poem.
Same as being out of time when you sing a song.
Keep up the good work, you will get it, but it can't be forced.
Also be original in thought, try not to use clichés unless it is
representative of the character or moment.
Just my thoughts on this.
Can't wait to read the next one! |
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| Reviewed by Dove JoAnne Cromp (Reader) |
9/3/2006 |
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This is precious Jen..
Eternal Love, Dove |
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| Reviewed by Mr. Ed |
9/3/2006 |
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Roses are red, and love is together, We will always find each other forever and ever
A very lovely ode to love, Jennifer. Quite a graphic, too. |
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
9/2/2006 |
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You certainly leave no doubt as to your sentiments via your verses, Jennifer. I find the roses most symbolic. Thank you for sharing this offering. Love and peace to you,
Regis |
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