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- from the spring to the glass, from the past to the future -
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I hold a glass of water while you watch the liquid treasure; rare like a benitoite, precious and difficult to hold. That's what I do with my breath, carried away in this world, so fast, too disappointing, barely human.
I'm in search of fresh, soothing truth.
Everything may not be simple, yet some needs are limpid - imperious to you and me - just like a handful of water that quenches our thirst. It comes from a spring and flows into a river, reflecting light and images of a whole life.
If you lean, you'll see the bottom: pieces of gold shine under the sun and a carnation is carried by the current. There's also a letter from a distant past, a medal of glory that did not last, the pill-box that fell from your pocket and the cigarette you threw when you gave up smoking.
In the water, you can sense your future, it touches your toes and invites you to dive for an essential effort that will teach you how to swim.
You are careful, but soon you may find out how safe it feels to move on and how far you can really go.
On a hot afternoon, the water will evaporate from the shale ground, while later, the flow will reach the whole bed.
Lie on it, surrounded by the stuff that dreams are made of. I am made of water and I want to be your dream.
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| Reviewed by Elizabeth Price |
2/21/2008 |
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Awesome.
This poem snuck up on me. The comfort provided at the beginning turns into excitement in the end. Bravo. Liz |
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| Reviewed by Cryssa C |
2/19/2008 |
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This is beautiful!
So many thoughts ran through my head as I read this... relationships, water, watching my life's memories drift by, and...of Christ... the living water that can quench our thirst and is there to surround us and make our dreams come true, if we but let Him. Powerful words you have spun...
Cryssa |
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
12/17/2007 |
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Lie on it, surrounded
by the stuff that dreams are made of.
I am made of water
and I want to be your dream
So wonderful the way you express yourself. God in the universe. To think that someone would actually feel that way about someone else. Your words leave me breathless. Thank you, Axilea.
Love and best wishes to you,
Regis |
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| Reviewed by Art Sun |
11/3/2007 |
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When one flows with the streams of water as in life one can become as a current or a sea, grasping with the oceans the past and the present into the flowing time of the future...even dreams bring the source to one's thirst...
nice work...
Art Sun... |
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| Reviewed by Andre Bendavi ben-YEHU |
11/3/2007 |
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In every work of this author I find the contents and lexis placement an enrichment of imagery and brilliance of the subject dealt... There is always a learning guidance; and there is a constant teaching shown with the colors of the rainbow of knowledge and wisdom throughout the lines of the composition. "A Dream of H2O" is what poetic accomplishment is named excellent.
In admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU |
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| Reviewed by Poetess of The Soul Sheila G |
10/28/2007 |
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What a natural recurring response to the energy of water!
VEry clear and to the point!
Warmly, Warrior Purple Lady Sheeeoox
STay Positive! |
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| Reviewed by Karen Palumbo |
10/28/2007 |
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Above all you have such a clear and distinct outlook, enjoyed this...
Be safe,
Karen |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
10/28/2007 |
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Intense realism covered in a mist of romance...this analogy breathes live into my tired old eyes as hope seems to shimmer from the surface of your work. Well done Axilea
Fee |
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| Reviewed by Charlie |
10/27/2007 |
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My favorite part of this poem was the invitation to dive in and see where the fluid future takes you. I love the way you'd introduce a thought,
have three lines,
each of a few words;
clarifying.
It moved the poem right along--gave it movement like little eddies now and again, and then a current to pull you through. I also love water--one of my favorite things in the world--the sound of it--the taste of it--the smell of it in the air--I could write poems about it! (But not like you) --Charlie |
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| Reviewed by Susan de Vegter |
10/27/2007 |
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So very beautiful. You write nature's biography of water as though you were personally assigned by Mother Nature!
Love,
Susan |
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