Death = U. S. E. R. = Unknown Selfserving Everlasting Reality
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Karen Gallo-Dunn
Saturday, February 02, 2002
Rated "G" by the Author.
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Unknown - Selfserving -Everlasting -Reality
The downside of Life and Happiness
Touched me Several Times Before
Unaware - Clueless -- No Warning --
Surprise!!
Mr. Death
Kicks Down Your Door
Unfaithful TIME
Uncontrollable
Unnerving
Selfish TIME
Spontaneous
Shocking
Evil TIME
Eruptive
Excruciating
Ruthless TIME
Righteous
Real
The USER arrives by Surprise
The Feared Evil Spirit -- Sucker of Life
The USER takes Loved ones Away
Anywhere - Any Time - Day or Night
FEAR NOT
for the loved one
FEAR NOT
Grant Eternal Peace!
OH !
BUT! Judge THYSELF Indeed:
Cringe, Cry, Grieve, Scream, Yell, Howl, Curse,
Damn, Blame and Bleed
Ask Questions,
Search the Soul
Scrutinize methods, motives, actions and words
Double Check -- all Ifs, AND's, Buts -
Madness Will Seize The Mind
Totally Out of touch --
Erratic -
At times Absurd !!
Beloved Humans Left Behind Off Balance utter
Nonsense Words
Enslaved and Unnerved in the Vast Vivid Void
Captured by the Gatekeeper - void Existence!
Brutal Reality - Raw Nerve Endings Exposed
Uncontrolled Pain and Irrationality
Questions of a "MAD" Human Mind
Murmurs Low
HOW DARE YOU
LEAVE ME
HOW DARE YOU
What am I to do
What about me? me? me?
For I fear
Yes I fear
I need You Here
I want You Near
How did I kill You?
What could I do?
To have saved you from YOUR DEATH
Insanity Controls - A Hairshirted Soul -
Loss we can't explain
Self Guilt and Blame is a Sad Shame
Self imposed, Unintentional, Unwarranted Pain
YOU - WE - Me are rendered
Powerless -
Time controls the USER Game
USER = Unknown Self-serving Everlasting Reality
Live Life Believing Time Heals All
Death is not by our Command
No Human Credit
or Blame
et. al.
Unless an act by
Thy Own Hand!
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| Reviewed by Lori Moore |
5/8/2004 |
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You have crafted some excellent lines. I especially like,
"Insanity Controls - A Hairshirted Soul -
Loss we can't explain
Self Guilt and Blame is a Sad Shame
Self imposed, Unintentional, Unwarranted Pain"
The use of caps in uncommon places, though often annoying (in my opinion) when used in other works, add to the creativity of this poem. The overall topic is handled extremely well. Finally, I love the ending. Enough!
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| Reviewed by Roger Ochs |
10/23/2002 |
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"I used her and she used me. Neither one of us cared. We were getting our share." - Bob Segar "Night Moves"
Often a good poem will bring a song to mind. Yours brought this one. Well Done. |
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| Reviewed by Constance Bell |
8/23/2002 |
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| Excellent writing. Unless you have been there done that, how did you ever find the words. Your Friend Connie |
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| Reviewed by Michelle Furlong |
2/21/2002 |
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| Wow...such strong words. Very emotional poem. I only wish i could express feelings as you do. |
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| Reviewed by William Manchee |
2/9/2002 |
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| That says it all. |
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| Reviewed by |
2/5/2002 |
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| too cool!!! |
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| Reviewed by Wayne |
2/5/2002 |
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| Great work Karen, it really captures the feelings well. |
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| Reviewed by Janet Caldwell (author) |
2/4/2002 |
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| Wow Karen, this says so much. I love it. JC xoxoxoxoxo |
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| Reviewed by C. Gourlay |
2/4/2002 |
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| Karen, I am not certain whether my work has ever inspired another writer, but even if it had, their efforts would quite certainly have paled in comparison to your efforts in USER. Furthermore, I am not certain whether my often jumbled poems have ever been understood as completely as you evidently have understood *Eighteen*. Little though its weight and possibly also its worth, I THANK YOU for writing this, for being inspired to write it, and for the way reading it, and knowing this, has made me feel. |
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| Reviewed by karen |
2/4/2002 |
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karen,
heavy,Don't stop now , your a natural!!
Love Norm |
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| Reviewed by Donna |
2/3/2002 |
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Karen,
Your words ring so close to my heart. Very
good. Love Donna |
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| Reviewed by Diane Szkutnicki |
2/2/2002 |
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| Hi! Karen, This one is great! The words are put together so well.I recently felt alot of this. Love, Diane |
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| Reviewed by Carol |
2/2/2002 |
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| Wonderful Karen! |
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| Reviewed by Gregory Sonn |
2/2/2002 |
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Hi Karen,
Easily the best piece I have read from you to date!Very well constructed with a sense of understandable confusion.Left behind off balance utter nonsense words is very good and we do feel like that at the time.The user feels nothing for us. Nice work Karen.
Gregg |
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