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| Reviewed by Barbara Terry |
8/23/2009 |
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Very deeply touching. I remember when my aunt passed away of a brain aneurism in 1960. Nobody saw it coming, and she had been to the doctor not long before complaining about bad headaches. I can, and I think others here can too, identify with this poem. It is sad, but also touching. It just makes you want to reach out and hug this child and tell her everything will be fine. Of course those words would be meaningless at such a time, but will be remembered later on. Thank you sis for this very touching poem.
May the Lord Jesus bless you, and those whom you love, and who love you, and be with you always, and at your side constantly. With much love in my heart, joy to the world, peace on earth, & ((((((((((MANY WONDERFUL SISTERLY HUGGGGSSSS)))))))))), your little sister, Barbie. |
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| Reviewed by Gene Williamson |
8/22/2009 |
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Sad, but not overly sentimental; beautifully rendered
moment captured perfectly in the two closing lines.
-gene. |
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| Reviewed by Phyllis Jean Green |
8/22/2009 |
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Deeply, deeply touching. Your tenderness and compassion shine in
every line. Between, we feel the pain and undertanding that
inspired you to create this sad, sweet tribute. Always stay you!
<3 'Pea' <3 |
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| Reviewed by Jackie (Micke) Jinks |
8/22/2009 |
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Oh, Lori! You've touched many hearts with this beauty, mine included.
So expressive the "...one petal at a time."
Blessing and Love - Micke |
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| Reviewed by MaryGrace Patterson |
8/21/2009 |
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| Very touching and heart felt. The poem flows well and brings the reader into the scene. Its sad , but emotional and powerful...M |
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| Reviewed by Sheila Roy |
8/21/2009 |
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Powerful emotions from the imagery. Love this. Hugs,
Sheila |
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| Reviewed by OnepoetGem * |
8/21/2009 |
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| way to verse Lori, kind of sad though, I guess the sadness is the thorns part of the rose, ouch! cheers |
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| Reviewed by jude forese |
8/20/2009 |
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| moving and nicely written ... |
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| Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK |
8/20/2009 |
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You'd Loved My Rose Gardens,Plumb Trees,Exotic Plants I Lost All Via Fraudulently Foreclosed Home...
Excellent Write On...
TRASK |
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| Reviewed by Brenda Dobson |
8/20/2009 |
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| Very moving words...a glimpse of something we may all experience someday. |
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| Reviewed by Bennett Kremen |
8/20/2009 |
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| A sweet song of sorrow. |
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| Reviewed by Patrick Granfors |
8/19/2009 |
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| Powerful imagery and wonderful words. Beautiful, Lori |
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| Reviewed by Elizabeth Hobbs |
8/19/2009 |
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Hi Lori
Your words brought tears. Very beautiful. Thank you, Liz |
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| Reviewed by Joyce Bell |
8/19/2009 |
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BEAUTIFUL WORK LORI...FILLED WITH EMOTION AND DEPTH, YOUR IMAGERY AND PHRASES ARE DONE WELL. THANKS FOR SHARING AND BLESSINGS.
JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS |
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| Reviewed by Ronald Hull |
8/19/2009 |
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So bitter sweet.
Ron |
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| Reviewed by Peter Schlosser |
8/19/2009 |
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| This is extraordinary Lori. Brilliant use of metaphor and imagery combined to form a poingnant message resonant with grief and sadness. Well done! |
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| Reviewed by Jeanette Cooper |
8/19/2009 |
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| Your poem is heartwrenching and paints a sad picture that many mother's have experienced. What a great metaphor in the last two lines--brings tears. |
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| Reviewed by La Belle Rouge |
8/19/2009 |
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| Perfection in rhyme and flow, deeply touching in images and message. |
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| Reviewed by Dallas D'Angelo-Gary |
8/19/2009 |
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| Wow! Concise and beautiful, with not a single word wasted. Absolutely beautiful! |
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| Reviewed by Jerry Bolton |
8/19/2009 |
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| Nothing I can say will surpass what has already been commented, but the innocence of the young lass, not fully understanding, but understanding nevertheless, is heartbreakingly real. |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
8/19/2009 |
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Gulping down the lump in my throat after reading this one Lori, it is so beautiful and so very real. After just attending a funeral not to long ago and yes wearing my black suit and trying to keep my own tears in check to comfort my wife and daughters at the loss of her mother and their grandmother...I felt this deep in my heart. It is pure heart..
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| Reviewed by Sherry Heim |
8/19/2009 |
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Heartbreaking and beautifully penned, Lori. I am moved to tears.
Take care,
Sherry |
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| Reviewed by Annabel Sheila |
8/19/2009 |
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A simply lovely write, Lori! I felt very deeply every single word. Beautifully done.
Hugs,
Anna |
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| Reviewed by George Carroll |
8/19/2009 |
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| Heartfelt poetry. Wonderful |
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| Reviewed by Ankin Timourian |
8/18/2009 |
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Sad but true...nicely done, especially last two lines...
Love,
Ankin
Inspired by Fountain of Trevi |
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| Reviewed by Karen Palumbo |
8/18/2009 |
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Oh Lori, this just oozes with grief and loss, especially for the motherless child...
Be always safe,
Karen |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
8/18/2009 |
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A splendid poem with a finale so exqusite that tears
must fall,but also with joy for the authors creativity! |
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| Reviewed by High Country Girl |
8/18/2009 |
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here's another petal just about to drop...Oh you brought on the tears with this...
Prolly whats needed too.
Ty Dahls
Ch'erie xx |
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| Reviewed by Christine Alwin |
8/18/2009 |
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| ...such sadness,,,breaks my heart |
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| Reviewed by John Flanagan |
8/18/2009 |
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Lori,
Tremendous charge and power in this delicate, petal-like telling; I love your touch and sensitivity here.
John |
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| Reviewed by Carol Grace |
8/18/2009 |
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| Very poignant, Lori. I love the last two lines. Carol |
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