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Candy Rain Rain has to qualify, this one won't make the cut. Tickling doesn't count, I whisper around an untouched pillow. Gentle was for hippies. Quaint term to google. Oh, but it is sweet to lie comforted by your refusal to give in to the urge to pound. So good, you turned in your drum. Sometimes play brushes, I hear, when not filling in. Tickling your night gig? Feel you on my skin, flesh feathers make me entertain the hope that you, at least, will stay your sweet self. Only tickle until I blush. Feed me, sweet rain. Hum something silly. Hum Purple Rain. I cracked the window. Slip in and we'll pretend to be here for each other. Have all the sugar we want. No cavities. Tickling never turns to torture, thunder is only air clapping far, far away. Closing my eyes. Even smell sweet. Come here.
©) Phyllis Jean Green, 2006
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| Reviewed by Andre Bendavi ben-YEHU |
5/11/2006 |
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Poetic magnificence comes in "Candy Rain".
Keep them coming, Poet, the world must read You!
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU |
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| Reviewed by Erin Kelly-Moen |
2/19/2006 |
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Sweet Pea... Candy rain, indeed! So sweet and sticky, raining on bared substance of something-essence...
A Masterpiece, in my mind, Pea-girl! Love the way you lovingly crucify/adore all selves/self. Candy lover, nevertheless.
Erin Elizabeth Kelly-Moen |
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| Reviewed by Victoria Murray |
2/19/2006 |
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Loved this one! Thanks for sharing.
Hugs,
V~ |
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| Reviewed by Carmen Ruggero |
2/17/2006 |
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"thunder is only air clapping" Only YOU could write that line! There's a child in you who continues to bless us with endless imagination.
Carmen :-) |
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| Reviewed by Carole Mathys |
2/16/2006 |
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What a delicious way to see rain, love it Pea...I wonder what kind is in the puddles in my yard?
love and peace...Carole |
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| Reviewed by Birgit and Roger Pratcher |
2/16/2006 |
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A beautiful write, loved it,
Birgit and Roger |
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| Reviewed by M.Bennett Hooper (Mikii) |
2/16/2006 |
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Lovely, loving it. Candy rain, yeah. Peace, love and blessings.
Mikii |
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| Reviewed by Tinka Boukes |
2/16/2006 |
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Splendidacious...lol!!
Love it!!
Love Tinka |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
2/16/2006 |
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Intriquing images here that remind me of lying on the banks of a stream in the heat of summer neath that gentle rain. Perhaps the old hippie in me coming out.
Felix |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
2/15/2006 |
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You are a trip Pea;-)... A rain to remember! Beautiful work!
Eileen |
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| Reviewed by Saul Logan |
2/15/2006 |
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| very well written; I am still just in awe of everything in this one... |
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| Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner |
2/15/2006 |
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Pea,
Awesome imagery in this feel good write--well done!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. |
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| Reviewed by Rosemarie Skaine |
2/15/2006 |
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| Ah, to dream. Very well said. R |
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