Recent Reviews for David Rumer
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Tainted Legacy Gen-X Inherits the Hangover (Book) - 8/11/2008 12:13:53 PM
I think this is absolute biased, bigoted rubbish masquerading as historical analysis! Prejudiced minds always look for someone or some group to blame for their deficiencies. You ain't seeing straight. B.S. from a G.X.'r looking for more excuses!
The Hun (Short Story) - 10/31/2007 5:21:15 AM
Hello David,
I am not surprised you had stories published as you write very well indeed. However this story needs some work.
The first serious problem is the question of shifting points of view, especially at the beginning when I wasn't certain to whom you were referring. This is a turn-off for readers as they have to read the same thing twice to try to understand what you are saying. However the good news is that it is easily fixed.
Not so easily fixed is the problem of introducing characters who play little or no dramatic role in the story to bring it to its final conclusion. You intrigue us with Gene and his father and you make us believe one or both will play a serious role in your story. It doesn't happen. This is probably because it is a true story and you are trying to be as truthful as possible. However, as this is written as a story, you can exercise your right to writer's license. You have to give us more motivation for the German taking his own life. As it stands, you give us no clue what drove him to such a desperate act. You have to show us in a dramatic way how he and his family are ostracised by the community, how he watches his wife clean the bloody nose of their son after a run-in with some kids from school on his way home. You have to make it clear to us why he doesn't take his family away to, say, Canada, which isn't as far as Germany and much easier to reach. Why did Franz feel so impotent? This is too good a story to remain as raw as this. If you do fix it, please let me know. I would like to read it again.
Canned Cream (Short Story) - 10/2/2007 9:49:45 AM
Mr. Rumer, I enjoyed "Canned Cream". My parents grew up in Chicago during the Depression. Your story reminded me of many anecdotes they told me of that time. My mother's family, like the family you wrote of, used Carnation evaporated milk in place of cream. People knocking on the door and asking for food was, they told me, also a common occurance.
Your sharp, insightful writing brought that era to life for me. Well done.
Canned Cream (Short Story) - 8/1/2003 11:24:07 AM
I can remember my daddy talking about the depression, and my grandmother, also. What an awful time that must have been! Excellent write; enjoyed! (((HUGS))) and love, your friend in Texas, Karen Lynn. :(
The Hun (Short Story) - 7/30/2003 1:38:38 PM
This is a tough story. Well written, incredible set up!
The Hun (Short Story) - 7/28/2003 3:24:50 PM
so sad how teasing can affect a person years later. heartbreaking story; well done! :( (((HUGS)))
Ein Grassenhopper und das Bunchen Anters (Article) - 4/13/2007 12:47:29 AM
would love to know who wrote thos Post stories and read some more--
tom shaffer
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BREAK BLOW BURN (Article) - 3/14/2006 8:55:48 PM
Am curious about "destruction of our store of human knowledge". "She preaches to the choir" Is she aware of a planned audience- that is, is that her intention. Enjoyed the remarks. Cannot fully comprehend Paglia or Dickinson and will again study Rumer Comments.
Got a print out.
Joyce Nitsche
Ein Grassenhopper und das Bunchen Anters (Article) - 3/14/2006 8:28:08 AM
Sehr gute! and very, very cute.
Ein Grassenhopper und das Bunchen Anters (Article) - 8/22/2003 3:40:48 PM
(((david)))
vunderbar! :) diden i enjoyen the storie? JA!!!! :)
(((HUGS))) and love,
karla. :)
Ein Grassenhopper und das Bunchen Anters (Article) - 8/21/2003 6:13:32 PM
Hmmmm...what a clever grasshopper, and Florida will be forever beholden to you for this story.
smiles,
Gina
T.J.'s Dilemma (Article) - 7/28/2003 3:01:17 PM
We had a similar experience with a persian cat called Caruso (for his singing ability!), he came home covered in creosote, a neighbour had discarded it after painting a fence with it and Caruso fell into the pool. He also came straight to us and we gave him a bath using Johnsons baby shampoo, then we took him to the vet. The vet told us more or less the same thing you were told, plus he was highly relieved we had not used dishwashing liquid on Caruso, it totally removes the natural oils in the cats fur and skin, causing further problems. I have an article on this website about Caruso that was published in Cats magazine also, unfortunately he is no longer with us. But we have four others now, plus next doors cat!! Jackie <> <
T.J.'s Dilemma (Article) - 7/23/2003 6:42:20 PM
He trusted you as his surrogate 'mama cat'-- he came to you knowing you would be able to make him feel better. I'm glad he had enough sense not to lick the oil off of himself... many cats aren't that smart.
Macrosoft (Poetry) - 5/14/2009 6:06:15 AM
I like your writing style very much. Another good one!
Last Will & Etc. (Poetry) - 5/14/2009 6:05:35 AM
Giggle.....good one!
Viva la Differences (Poetry) - 5/14/2009 6:05:09 AM
How sad a testament to our brave heroes who fought for freedom in other countries. What on earth is wrong with the world? Your poem was sad and heartfelt, and very well written!
Eyewitmess (Poetry) - 5/14/2009 6:01:39 AM
I love poetry about nature, and this one is lovely! Very nicely penned David.
Sentimental Journey (Poetry) - 5/14/2009 6:00:26 AM
Awesome poem David! Loved the lyrical flow and the ease of reading and understanding the journey of life.
Amen (Poetry) - 4/24/2009 5:30:25 PM
Amen!!!!!!!!!!!
Last Will & Etc. (Poetry) - 4/24/2009 5:28:56 PM
Yea!! We can all learn from this!!!
Sentimental Journey (Poetry) - 4/24/2009 5:28:18 PM
You are a movie star and a poet. Righto!
Duty's Call (Poetry) - 12/15/2008 4:57:35 AM
A tribute to the those who made and are making the ultimate sacrafice.
Widow's Weeds (Poetry) - 8/7/2008 11:17:15 AM
I do wear widow's weeds for a year now. Solitude is hard to live with. Trying to be on den as therapy, it does help. This is a sad poem but true. **********
Amen (Poetry) - 8/2/2008 12:39:28 AM
I guess I'm the first male to say how true. Very well expressed David. Oh and I knew a man who had a child who became my wife who had my daughters!
Eyewitmess (Poetry) - 7/9/2008 12:04:53 PM
This was a delight to read,David. Made me look at the natural world with fresh eyes. Thanks for sharing your talent!
-Zach
Macrosoft (Poetry) - 7/9/2008 12:01:53 PM
Interesting poem- very original. Like the poem's name.
If I were Bill Gates neighbor, I would share Jesus with him so He might know the only true source of lasting peace. The only thing one can take from this life and leave is our relationship to Christ.
-Zach
Upscale Love (Poetry) - 5/20/2008 2:57:20 PM
Sounds like this love was not to be. Too bad, seems he would of been a good traveling companion too.
Amen (Poetry) - 9/6/2007 4:01:23 PM
I am blown away. Your picture looks just like that of a man. Yet you know what women really think. Could it be because a man who has seen a man that saw a man who was in the Revolutionary War is old enough to have been there and done that and finally learned a few things about women folks?
Sentimental Journey (Poetry) - 7/13/2007 9:07:01 AM
This truly is a world within a poem - great!
Eyewitmess (Poetry) - 6/25/2007 10:04:52 PM
Interesting perspective on such a cosmic world....Enjoyed...
Be safe,
Karen
Last Will & Etc. (Poetry) - 6/3/2007 12:34:46 PM
Very funny, I am laughing loudly.
Amen (Poetry) - 2/24/2007 11:34:25 PM
I love this. Ageless wisdom at its very best!
Rgds
Shreya
If I were King (Poetry) - 2/20/2007 3:19:06 PM
I enjoyed it David with a wry grin!
Bill
Humilitous (Poetry) - 10/16/2006 10:40:54 PM
Clever and concise. Thank you, DL
Macrosoft (Poetry) - 6/19/2006 11:29:20 AM
VERY NICE GOOD WORD FLOW
Seasons IV (Poetry) - 10/5/2005 7:22:36 AM
I got the phrase "Hazy Autumn Days" in a dream and decided to search them on the internet.
This poem came up and i can really relate to it. It has put my mind to rest about some things i was worrying about. Strange how things like that happen isn't it?
Just thought I'd share that with you. Thank you David Rumer, keep up the good writing!
Peace, love, rock n roll
Jo
Last Will & Etc. (Poetry) - 9/13/2005 6:20:10 AM
Poet, I can honestly say this poetic treat brought an ear-to-ear smile across my face. Thanks for sharing it. Take good care and be well.
Karen's Boys (Poetry) - 9/13/2005 6:19:43 AM
Poet, as a father and grandfather this poetic feast was a full meal delivered with all the trimmings. Thank you for sharing it. Take good care and be well.
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