A Bit Of Fun (Short Story) - 12/16/2011 1:58:57 AM
My own criticism is I would like to this expanded into a novella.
Your characterisations of Crispin and Pastor are well drawn! From my POV, neither of them have grown up and are still stuck in that old groove of their ill-rehearsed hey-day - even though Pastor ideally would like to move on. You write humorously too. I especially liked the bit on page 3 which started off with 'Crispin always thought Peter look at his best .... because I knew what was coming next.
And of course I liked your reference to Gram Parsons - did he really have a band called the International Submarine Band?
A Bit Of Fun struck me as a quaint period piece - even though I presume it was set in modern day? Summing it up, I thought the premise was rather poignant and desperate ..... but oh so familiar in a nostalgic way! It certainly struck a chord in me re: the Old Days.I could certainly identify with it.
confusion becalmed (Poetry) - 4/16/2013 6:37:49 AM
No it is merely riffing on a theme of uncertainty, and lacking guidance in life and is unrelated to Catholicism...
confusion becalmed (Poetry) - 3/15/2013 7:37:41 AM
I say that I write poetry to improve my vocabulary. Upon reading your poem, my vocabulary has once again, been challenged.
Among the misty references in the poem I gather that you're talking about the recent event where a new pope has been installed and all the worship-hungry masses no longer are confused without a father figure to guide them in their daily life. Nicely disguised, but very meaningful.
Ron
Journeys Endless (Poetry) - 11/26/2012 1:07:34 AM
This poem is an original voice from the world of poetry ..... I can't wait for Julian Isaacs' book of poetry to come out.
Spring (Poetry) - 12/18/2011 7:20:56 PM
You've experience timeless springs of the west. Nicely done.
