Recent Reviews for Diane C Hundertmark
A Work in Progress - Come the Realms of Winter (Book) - 6/25/2009 11:36:03 AM|
Only one comment on this first chapter? I wish there were more and with luck I may have this book finished and published this year. Is there any interests in more of the story???
The Dragon and The Rose - Part 1: The Turning Point (Book) - 4/24/2007 12:51:43 PM
Hi! Diane, I read the excerpts of your 'dragons' books and found them fascinating. I am three quarters through my "fantasy' book; my first.
I was wondering how is the market for these kind of books? I am thinking of making this kind of book my genre too. Best of luck!
Please feel free to visit me at Freewebs.com/kendoo or here in the 'den'.
A Work in Progress - Come the Realms of Winter (Book) - 3/14/2007 3:43:51 AM
Finally got this one going, very cool to see that you're writing again Dianna.
The Dragon and The Rose - Part 2: The Confrontation (Book) - 5/1/2002 2:53:47 PM
Outstanding sequal to the first Dragon and the Rose, with a wonderful ending. The story flows along quickly, and answers many questions raised in book 1. A very good ending to a great story !!!!
Childhood Shadows (Short Story) - 11/9/2009 9:58:34 AM
Riveting. Your work never fails to impress and excite me.
The Papyrus of Queen Nitocris (Short Story) - 11/9/2009 9:56:15 AM
You mimic the style of H.P. Lovecraft extremely well, and with an added blend of your own sweet and exotic spices. Awesome job. In my opinion this story should become a novella or novel, because not only do the subjects of pyramids and Egypt conjure up fear and interest in the people whose minds are sensitive to the bizarre, but it is a great story in itself.
Childhood Shadows (Short Story) - 8/31/2009 2:07:03 PM
I disagree with Kenneth. I think the brief summaries were fine and dandy, and altogether not dissimilar to sour candy, based on the brevity of the language overall. The beginning reminded me of "Turn of the Screw," by Henry James--good suspense. The thing that bothered me the most was drinking coffee right before going to bed--I'm not the type of guy who does well with caffeine after dinner, and that took a bit of the reality out of things for me--but otherwise well told.
Childhood Shadows (Short Story) - 1/5/2008 12:27:33 PM
I really enjoyed reading this. Wonderful story in its own right, but the fact that it really happened just makes it even more riveting. I felt like I was in the Twilight Zone - Bravo.
Childhood Shadows (Short Story) - 5/31/2006 8:18:08 PM
You needed to expand the others stories and define what happened and what the form was.
Childhood Shadows (Short Story) - 4/29/2005 8:18:18 AM
Wow. Great story. Well told.
The Papyrus of Queen Nitocris (Short Story) - 10/4/2004 4:37:18 PM
Great Lovecraft expansion. I found this visit to ancient Egypt quite enjoyable. Excellent work.
The Papyrus of Queen Nitocris (Short Story) - 3/8/2003 5:37:29 AM
I need to see this one. Bringing back the roots of where you came from being from the Providence area. I am going to have to take a look at this. I read Inprisoned With The Pharohs, so this sounds intriguing.
Childhood Shadows (Short Story) - 8/17/2002 12:27:20 PM
Great - Really keeps you in suspense.
I never knew that you had seen this
as it happened.
Childhood Shadows (Short Story) - 8/15/2002 12:53:29 PM
WOW! YOUR DAD, ALWAYS WAS A HERO IN MY EYES,
YOU HAVE CAPTURED HIM EXACTLY AS I REMEMBER HIM.
Childhood Shadows (Short Story) - 7/27/2002 12:36:31 AM
*shivers* for a while I had the feeling I was looking at miself in a mirror
Childhood Shadows (Short Story) - 7/2/2002 1:06:31 PM
Great story Dee !!! The ending gave it a perfect, creepy touch.
Childhood Shadows (Short Story) - 5/16/2002 11:54:28 PM
This one is awsome as hell. I am trying to see what others you have here - keep up the good work. This is a messed up one but I like it, this is a scary read.
Childhood Shadows (Short Story) - 5/9/2002 1:19:03 AM
Very suspensful, good ending.
Childhood Shadows (Short Story) - 5/8/2002 10:18:11 PM
This was riveting! So you actually saw the person who committed the crime? Tell me more girl!
Childhood Shadows (Short Story) - 5/8/2002 8:36:08 PM
Excellent story Dee. It really held my interest. The ending makes it a bit more sinister and frightening.
Challenge Given at Time of Roman Catholic Confirmation (Article) - 10/10/2013 2:37:29 PM
You are correct. The translations from all the languages are part of the different views of the Bible. Oddly from a Jewish friend of my family I learned that re translations have also occurred for their Books. This "fun" applies across all faiths. Even some scientific papers.
Challenge Given at Time of Roman Catholic Confirmation (Article) - 10/10/2013 12:42:40 PM
Of course, many biblical sounding truisms are really philosophical or ethical and other words can be substituted quite easily. That is why we cannot literally say the Bible is correct because the Bible was translated from many sources in several languages and the translators (and their rich benefactors like King James) made sure that the “right words” were in the Bible so that, upon repetition and indoctrination, like confirmation often is, the followers will all believe the same thing and quote the same biblical passages over and over to reinforce the thoughts imposed by the church. Since you altered church dogma, you may have shocked a few people with your statement.
Rhode Island History --Inspiration for Horror! (Article) - 7/31/2003 9:56:59 AM
I FIRST GOT INTO RHODE ISLANDS HISTORY OF VAMPIRES WHEN I FOUND OUT MY UNCLE LIVES 5 MINUTES AWAY FROM THE GRAVESITE OF NELLIE VAUGHN WHEN I FIRST WENT TO VISIT THE SITE I DISCOVERED THAT THE GRAVE WAS NO LONGER STANDING.TODAY ME AND MY FAMILY ARE GOING TO VISIT MERCY BROWNS.
Rhode Island History --Inspiration for Horror! (Article) - 4/11/2003 1:11:56 AM
Strong one here -- being that I visited New England, I can see where the gothic would have its roots in New England. I wanted to do something similar about the Midwest but that is going to be harder because it has a history that is recently quite macabre. Living in Illinois, you'd hear the stories about people cutting other people open for their infants in a ritualistic nature. A Charles Manson type of murder then the freakish suicide stories you hear over here about people laying on the rails allowing the train to decapitate them.
The most macabre of them would have to be where I grew up at in DuPage County -- on my street a woman was shot five times and found charred beyond reconition. Then the one that was close to me -- all too close because the person I went to school with did the killing of a cab driver. That this would be some of the true crime that is over here.
Answer To The Question - What Should We Become? (Poetry) - 7/10/2014 1:42:02 AM
Red Moon (Poetry) - 10/8/2013 9:59:20 AM
Wow 1972...I started writing poetry in the early to mid 60's so I think we began at about the same era.
New Title - A spining world (Poetry) - 8/4/2013 8:33:33 PM
Happy Anniversary! This next one will be #47 for me and I would have it no other way.
Problem is, one of us must leave before the other ...
Everyday (Poetry) - 8/4/2013 8:30:55 PM
Seems the simplest answers are the best.
Science seems to be finding this out as they hunt smaller and smaller particles until they find nothing at all.
Prophetical Waters (Poetry) - 3/13/2013 11:13:09 AM
Now if only I had saved some of my original work while in High School '66-'67...back when I was a Bob Dylan fan
Answer To The Question - What Should We Become? (Poetry) - 3/5/2013 4:26:56 PM
Boy, I WOULD GIVE ANYTHING TO HAVE MY CHILD-LIKE FAITH BACK..
Prophetical Waters (Poetry) - 3/3/2013 8:57:24 AM
I still see a “B”. But the poem did bring back my thoughts after seeing, “Full Metal Jacket.” War is hell.
Prophetical Waters (Poetry) - 3/3/2013 4:06:53 AM
i would have thought better than a b
A Path to Where? (Poetry) - 2/23/2013 12:09:20 PM
I was drawn to that path, too. We never know where the path will lead us until we try it.
A Path to Where? (Poetry) - 2/23/2013 4:36:45 AM
a very visual nice write thank you
New Title - A spining world (Poetry) - 4/14/2012 8:51:50 PM
Oh my...this one is old...originally written in 1981? That goes back a long time to be apt still. Excellent work.
The Battle Fierce (Poetry) - 2/14/2011 9:13:06 AM
This must have been a very powerful dream. It sounds like the real thing.
New Title - A spining world (Poetry) - 12/16/2009 4:11:26 AM
Unique layout....well written, Diane.
New Title - A spining world (Poetry) - 9/25/2009 9:39:39 PM
It's great to have someone to catch us when we need them to. We're lucky if we have that. I like the style of this poem. You give a feeling of falling (spinning) out of control. Nicely penned:)
Miss You (Poetry) - 8/31/2009 9:59:07 PM
I like this. It is short, simple, yet engaging. I hope to read more.
New Title - A spining world (Poetry) - 5/11/2009 9:39:42 AM
Beautiful! Interesting way you put this together. I enjoyed reading it and I'm sure your husband will love it. Good job.
New Title - A spining world (Poetry) - 1/30/2009 11:34:29 AM
It's rather nice, I think. Some people are kites & others are rocks. Both are important. :)
New Title - A spining world (Poetry) - 9/27/2008 1:03:06 PM
New Title - A spining world (Poetry) - 7/26/2008 11:29:30 PM
Great to have you online again. A spinning world you presented to us. Things should fall into place woon with the anniversary to celebrate this year. Enjoyable write. Hope hubby loves it. A nice present.
Oh! I See. (Poetry) - 7/2/2008 8:30:06 PM
This was good no matter how old... it still applies! lindalaw
Captured (Poetry) - 2/24/2008 12:08:37 PM
Captured (Poetry) - 2/7/2008 1:34:12 PM
Lovely imagery and if I told you even half of the poems I have written that were real we would be talking for a long time-LOL
Captured (Poetry) - 1/23/2008 10:56:48 AM
This is excellent, and it can mean what we need it to mean to us.
Miss You (Poetry) - 12/19/2007 7:32:16 AM
This is a lovely piece of writing--direct, concise, and full of vivid imagery.
Captured (Poetry) - 12/19/2007 7:06:55 AM
This is exactly what I am feeling right now, looking out my window and my balcony at the freezing rain ensnaring the colorful autumn leaves in its icy embrace. Thank you for sharing.
Captured (Poetry) - 11/19/2007 10:39:11 PM
Hi Diane! I read your poem, "Captured" I found it opening my mind a little. It is cryptic, but a fun read. A nightmare full of color and
messages. Great work sometimes come from dreams. Best of luck! Please feel free to visit my sites either at www.freewebs.com/kendoo or here in the "Den".
A puzzle (Poetry) - 6/26/2007 7:36:09 PM
Clever poem in graphic words. Congrats! Ned
The Battle Fierce (Poetry) - 4/22/2007 10:14:39 AM
Very symbolic and creative prose. Thank you for sharing your inspiring work. My best, Gloria
The Battle Fierce (Poetry) - 8/31/2006 8:53:17 AM
Your drea-world sure is pregnant with creativeness..wow!
The Battle Fierce (Poetry) - 6/14/2006 9:13:05 AM
IT WAS A PLEAUSRE TO READ SUCH FINE WORK.
so easy (Poetry) - 2/20/2005 9:54:02 AM
I agree - this would make a wonderful song, true heart and emotion involved - thanks for sharing!
Miss You (Poetry) - 11/30/2004 3:39:57 PM
Simplicity expressed perfectly
so easy (Poetry) - 6/30/2004 12:42:44 AM
You have the gift of a poet and the talent of song-writer!!!
Thank u for sharing your excellence!
The Battle Fierce (Poetry) - 3/13/2004 8:51:19 PM
very nice...well-crafted thought...i liked it.
The Battle Fierce (Poetry) - 2/21/2004 6:15:17 PM
Interesting. Marion Zimmer Bradley said that most of "The Heritage of Hastur" came to her in dreams, and it is her best book (in my opinion). Unfortunately, my dreams are much more mundane.
Miss You (Poetry) - 2/9/2004 5:30:27 AM
Lovely and so romantic with just a few well chosen words.
Miss You (Poetry) - 2/7/2004 12:02:54 PM
so easy (Poetry) - 2/7/2004 9:17:26 AM
The essence of relationship. I liked this poem.
Captured (Poetry) - 2/6/2004 7:36:17 PM
This one would almost sound like one I would write. Good to see that you are posting again D.
Everyday (Poetry) - 11/12/2003 10:39:07 AM
Very good write!
so easy (Poetry) - 10/17/2003 12:55:52 PM
Very good, definitely conveys the healing power of love!
Love in Christ~~
Everyday (Poetry) - 10/17/2003 12:53:04 PM
I really like this poem, Diane! It reminds me of one I wrote so many eons ago: "Only God Created It." I believe I have it up here at A/D. When you have time, stop a while at my A/D pages.
Love in Christ~~
Red Moon (Poetry) - 7/31/2003 6:59:09 PM
Nodding my head vigorously, sappy indeed, but the innocence of youth just shines right through. Loved every word of it
I Awake (Poetry) - 6/26/2003 9:12:04 AM
Actually, I must agree with Ann Berg: this poem is finished and quite to the waking point at that. Keep up the good work by moving on to new works. ~~Love in Christ, Bonnie Q
I Awake (Poetry) - 4/26/2003 10:12:41 AM
I would consider this finished,
A puzzle (Poetry) - 4/18/2003 9:56:09 AM
Hope the bastard finds his/her Dad
Difficult to comment out of context, but rouses interest even alone.
Red Moon (Poetry) - 4/18/2003 9:50:43 AM
Sappy. Sappy! Sappy! Sappy.
Thank God for youthful innocence.
I Awake (Poetry) - 4/18/2003 9:48:39 AM
Evokes that first awakening moment beautifully.
Everyday (Poetry) - 4/18/2003 9:45:15 AM
I wouldn't edit out the last eight, I would add an ammended edit of them to reflect where you have come since you wrote them, or would you change them at all?
I Awake (Poetry) - 4/17/2003 8:33:43 AM
have to agree with Elizabeth
Red Moon (Poetry) - 4/17/2003 4:52:46 AM
not so much sappy, guess I could see it has a little bit more of a cryptic tone than sappy. Kind of the "Book of Revelation" feel to this one.
Everyday (Poetry) - 4/17/2003 4:50:55 AM
It was an interesting write, keep it up -- how many notebooks do you have with your poems in there. I lost a lot of them between the move from Iowa back to Illinois, the ones that you'd see are close to the 1998 writings would have to be Gen of the Void and "Tundra Sands." The ideas for those where there when I was homeless, did a lot of writing when I was on the street -- some of it was from the nightmares that were there. I have one peice on the website from high school -- "Nickolaus A. Pacione's The Glenbard Horror" and that is on the website. I penned that in 1991 but revised it in 1997. It was a slasher story which was a play on the horror films I grew up watching except the killer in the story was nameless (the original version was a machete welding werewolf, but the newer version I left the killer nameless.)
so easy (Poetry) - 4/17/2003 4:46:21 AM
have any short stories which were written about that time as well? This one is older than I am. Good write to boot as well.
I Awake (Poetry) - 4/17/2003 4:44:58 AM
this one is a good one to say the least. You call this a work in progress -- how much longer are you going to make this one? Keep up the strong work. I got a poem up here titled "Pacione's Inferno" and a short story titled "Dreams From The Stillborn."
I Awake (Poetry) - 4/16/2003 9:20:05 PM
Looks like a finished work to me. Flows beautifully and the choice of words is supurb.
so easy (Poetry) - 4/16/2003 6:19:57 PM
Excellent! Simple, but to the point. It's always (most of the time) good to bring past works out. They can make us remember the feelings that brought forth the work in the first place.
so easy (Poetry) - 4/16/2003 5:53:03 PM
on "it was so hard" you need a separator... cuz the entire tense/tone/reason of the poem changes right there for a second... maybe "but..." or take it out and shove it at the end
New Title - A spining world (Poetry) - 4/8/2003 9:57:28 PM
Oh, and the form...so much relate, just waiting for the "you"...WONDERFUL, really love that you spun it, literally onto the screen, and what it 'means', oh, yes! +++++
The Battle Fierce (Poetry) - 3/1/2003 4:03:09 AM
good write here.
The Battle Fierce (Poetry) - 11/21/2002 8:08:30 PM
A puzzle (Poetry) - 10/20/2002 7:13:12 AM
impressive piece dee. There are some new ones on mine as well each one more sinister than the last.
New Title - A spining world (Poetry) - 10/20/2002 7:11:36 AM
not too shabby -- damn, never realized you have a classic here.
New Title - A spining world (Poetry) - 10/4/2002 11:32:48 AM
New Title - A spining world (Poetry) - 8/31/2002 1:32:42 PM
oh, this is indeed nice!! loved this!!
A puzzle (Poetry) - 8/31/2002 12:49:10 PM
Enjoyed this a lot!