Contradivtion (Poetry) - 10/31/2006 3:58:00 PM
Constant contradiction
In a World so Confused
Traped In america The Land
Of The Free
Powerful poetry.
Preacher man (Poetry) - 10/5/2006 10:43:53 AM
I understand the sentiment of this piece. No one should look down on anyone.
I would suggest some kind of a spell checker when you work.
dilinquant - delinquent
Judgeing - judging
Tryna - trying
prisinor - prisoner
cercumstance - circumstance
liveing - living
Rigtous - righteous
fakeing - faking
barley - barely
dont - don't
Richard Lloyd Cederberg
A new Day Beloved (Poetry) - 9/24/2006 12:07:37 PM
WOW, so powerful, excellent-can I suggest that in the 5th stanza, you start the third line with freedom-it blends a bit with the previous line-this should be published, people need to read writing like this that means something.
A new Day Beloved (Poetry) - 9/24/2006 5:10:17 AM
Peace is and will always remain a dream to pray and reach for.
Grand poetry and Welcome to AD.
Lisa
A new Day Beloved (Poetry) - 9/24/2006 4:30:42 AM
Very interesting
the optisim is encouraging, the ending a heart break
A tale well told...Welcome to Authors Den
pax A
A new Day Beloved (Poetry) - 9/24/2006 4:24:08 AM
Dreams can be deceptive. Great imagery. Victor
