Recent Reviews for Timothy James Foley
Assassin (Short Story) - 1/27/2003 6:03:48 PM|
OMG!! It's not dead?! You liah! ::hits him with poof mallet that she stole from Momo:: It's great so far, and it's all cool and dark and mysterious...oooo...yay for vampires! Yay for mysterious...weird...evil...voices...in the dark!! And try to finish this one. I wanna see what happens...
The Feast (Short Story) - 12/8/2002 11:13:38 PM
Killer peice!!!! I am also from around that area originally, where I lived was in Glendale Heights for 21 years. You'd like some of the things I have written as well -- keep up the fucked up works.
Made of Flesh and Bone (Article) - 1/14/2003 4:14:32 AM
I am enjoying my morning. Thanks for this one. This is the MOST entertaining article I've read so far!
My Sad Little Addiction... (Article) - 1/14/2003 4:08:13 AM
This is great! I love this!!!
TY for this.
Whining (Article) - 1/14/2003 4:06:06 AM
Thanks for the great reminder! (lol)
I feel the same way ~ guilty! ;0)
Whining (Article) - 12/30/2002 4:24:00 PM
LMAO at this one! yes, i have spent plenty of time on the pity pot, but i have to remember that plenty of people have it far worse than i ever will, so it does no good whinin' about my little aches and pains! but boy does it feel good when i let out my whines for the day!! i then can look back and think, "whoa. i hope i don't run into ME when i am in a bad mood; i'd make a FORMIDABLE enemy!" :) but it will surely make me feel good once i've gotten the nasties out! cute little whiny rant! :) love, your friend, karen lynn. (((HUGZ))) :)
Whining (Article) - 12/30/2002 4:17:21 PM
(((HUGS))) and thanks...sometimes, though, it just feels good to get it off our chest!! a little "whine" never hurt anybody. :) great write! love, karla. :)
My Sad Little Addiction... (Article) - 12/17/2002 9:35:53 AM
this is so well writ and interesting, you wrote such lovely words about the beautiful struggle that you have (hah wordplay, maybe).
Made of Flesh and Bone (Article) - 8/9/2002 6:18:46 AM
Wouldn't we all be well served to remmember this lesson. It is incrediable the pressure we put on ourselves to perform. Thanx for the reminder.
Life idea 2 (Article) - 7/6/2002 6:06:38 PM
Womderful...we all need to learn this lesson. Living life for and because of who we are.
The mental rantings of a disturbed 15 year old. (Article) - 7/5/2002 5:11:06 PM
I marvel at the idea of a 15yo being able to understand that words are the answer. That by expressing the emotions you can define and conquer them.
The mental rantings of a disturbed 15 year old. (Article) - 7/1/2002 10:02:35 PM
To me, this "ranting" seems to planned out and much like a production. However, I do enjoy and agree with the statement concerning a longing for emotion that will only come with a certain person.
The mental rantings of a disturbed 15 year old. (Article) - 6/25/2002 3:28:07 PM
Disturbed is what it's all about at 15. If nothing else, remember that this is the most disturbed you will ever be. It gets better. This was well expressed, good writing.
Life idea 2 (Article) - 6/12/2002 3:13:26 AM
That made me smile. Live like that much as you can. . .
A fleeting thought about perfection (Article) - 5/28/2002 1:56:09 AM
... Oh, Tim. Where will you be, when Utopia comes?
Erotik Poetry (Poetry) - 10/19/2007 10:52:58 PM
After this poem, I agree with your remark.
Very sensual and erotik...nice
Do You Wanna? (Poetry) - 10/18/2007 10:45:00 PM
When haven't we felt like this? Great piece...
A hatred for love (Poetry) - 10/18/2007 10:42:27 PM
This is truly an amazing piece. It is so true, it is the situation of my life right now. Applause all around.
All About Love (Poetry) - 10/18/2007 3:27:17 PM
This is fantastic. Your an amazing writer.
Sex (Need I explain this?) (Poetry) - 6/20/2007 6:46:14 PM
damn you good at given the details
F*ck It! (Very Angry...Vulgar Language...) (Poetry) - 6/17/2007 10:09:38 PM
u should check out some of my poems i love 2 vent also its one of the few things that keep me from punching someones face in
A hatred for love (Poetry) - 4/23/2007 11:53:59 AM
that is so good that how i feel about this boy i go with
A Bit Of Inward Reflection (Poetry) - 10/26/2006 5:30:47 PM
Nice Poem...really cute!.....But TO ALL AUTHORS! My Work Has Been Stolen! this is serious! Someone posted my poem titled "You Dont Need A Man" on the net and i cant find it! Please help me find it before the theif claims my work. (the poem now has no author) I promise u that i wrote that poem! I wrote it 2 years ago and someone stole it! PLEASE HELP ME FIND IT! Leave me a message on my page if u are willing to help!
A hatred for love (Poetry) - 9/25/2006 11:00:51 AM
love is so frustrating....i hate needing love so badly too! Great emotion!
Vampiric (Poetry) - 1/25/2005 2:33:49 PM
i like this poem very creative keep up the good work!!!!!!
Burn (Poetry) - 12/28/2003 12:38:33 AM
there is nothing like starting over, its all you can do sometimes to save your self. good luck and a very good write
Do You Wanna? (Poetry) - 5/22/2003 12:40:53 PM
Why argue with idiots ? Tell 'em to p*** up a rope. [smiles]
Do You Wanna? (Poetry) - 5/22/2003 8:07:51 AM
Great line "Mack truck intellect coming at ya punk.
My Last Goodbye To You (Poetry) - 5/19/2003 9:09:07 AM
Good! :( (((HUGS))) and love, your friend in Texas, Karen Lynn.
My Last Goodbye To You (Poetry) - 5/18/2003 8:27:03 PM
It's the potholes that keep us alert.
Smooth roads will lull you into false security.
My Last Goodbye To You (Poetry) - 5/18/2003 8:08:54 PM
gets to the core of things... well done!
My Last Goodbye To You (Poetry) - 5/18/2003 7:51:44 PM
Aww, wonderful write for such a sad experience... I hope this is fiction??
My Last Goodbye To You (Poetry) - 5/18/2003 7:22:42 PM
Well done. No wallowing allowed. Nice poem.
My Last Goodbye To You (Poetry) - 5/18/2003 6:44:40 PM
Excellent descriptive write!
My Last Goodbye To You (Poetry) - 5/18/2003 6:29:45 PM
Wiser words than most.
Just Another Bad Love Song (Poetry) - 5/7/2003 11:34:28 PM
love sucks, its my least favorite and favorite part of this on going life that we all perside in. we all hope for and long for that feeling of ... something, i don't know what it is, but we all want it. - i hope you will find it. - Annie
Burn (Poetry) - 5/2/2003 11:23:30 AM
Very nice piece!
Come What May (Poetry) - 4/26/2003 10:52:39 PM
its hard to tell the difference between love and adiction. in some of your stuff i can't hardly tell if your talking about a person or a substance.but all together good write.
Rebuilding Me (Poetry) - 4/26/2003 10:25:15 PM
its a pain ful process and it sucks, so good luck. Keep writing it seems to make things feel better at least it dose for me.
Dancing Fool (Poetry) - 4/26/2003 10:13:15 PM
i really like your poetry, its awsome thats about all i can say. for me its hard to recover from lies that hold you life so tight.
Firing squad (Poetry) - 4/26/2003 9:25:31 PM
once we kill the demons, peace is at hand... very well written!
Mixed Emotions (Poetry) - 4/26/2003 8:43:14 PM
a lot of you stuff tends to hit a low note, and reminds me of my battle of freedom in my head. great write.
A hatred for love (Poetry) - 4/26/2003 8:32:35 PM
it's great that you can express that emotion, of love that can never be and a hate that will never leave. Every one deals with this dam emotion.
Firing squad (Poetry) - 4/26/2003 7:06:12 PM
Where Did I Go? (Poetry) - 4/26/2003 10:28:03 AM
I love this one also. This is exactly how I felt yesterday. My life didnt matter anymore. I was throwing my future away. I wanted to leave my house and not come back. But I realized it wasent worth it. I still dont know what went through my head though.
A hatred for love (Poetry) - 4/26/2003 10:23:54 AM
I love it! It seams like everyone feels the same way about love, the part thats says "Because I love you, and I hate that I do, I'll never have you" is true in my case. Keep writing, this is a great poem.
Another Poem About Life (Poetry) - 4/23/2003 9:43:06 AM
"Flooded hallways and burning bridges.
Keep on walking.
Keep on walking.
Maybe I'll find it someday."
Tim, I couldn't agree more. When the world is at it's darkest ther is nothing to do but burn the bridges and keep walking and yes someday we will find it. I only pray when I do it is owrth the price I have paid to do so. Great Write
Another Poem About Life (Poetry) - 4/22/2003 8:46:12 AM
Good write, Tim! Love, your friend in Texas, Karen Lynn. (((HUGS))) :)
Another Poem About Life (Poetry) - 4/21/2003 11:53:11 PM
Empithise all the way with this, yep keep on keeping on, persistance will win through, admire you frankness and fortitude...
Working On It (Poetry) - 4/21/2003 4:46:19 PM
its so familiar..very good
Working On It (Poetry) - 4/17/2003 9:43:34 PM
our creative essence is fluid, knowing who we are can become somewhat stagnant... good write...
Working On It (Poetry) - 4/17/2003 6:46:36 PM
The Whole Idea Is To Learn From What You've (Experienced)Learned, Not Who I Am But Who Will I Become!
Working On It (Poetry) - 4/17/2003 4:52:05 PM
You need to get 'with the program' Tim. hahaha...nicely done on this one too.
Rebuilding Me (Poetry) - 4/17/2003 9:47:29 AM
Interesting from Tim. How sadly true that many of us live life as you describe. We rebuild ourselves over and over so we can fall off track and into little pieces again. To bad we can never ride the train instead of the train wreck. Wonderflu write.
Rebuilding Me (Poetry) - 4/16/2003 7:25:07 PM
ok...I am not trying to be funny....but I see an irony here....what you described in your poem, reminds me of what my son told me he went thru in marine boot camp...breaking down the old....to a NOTHING...then building from scratch.....lots of pain inbetween...self doubts, and kicking yourself for joining....but in the end...a build up to a new person
and I think thru poetry people can do that too.......
This is a good poem
its such a gift...we can give ourselves
and when we share it with others
its a blanket of trust!
ps I almost bought a house in Ringwood once!
Where Did I Go? (Poetry) - 4/15/2003 6:51:54 AM
Sad that we all must live through this feeling, however I believe we do. The crutches like drugs we use to help us along are really a part of the problem. Great write Drkman
Where Did I Go? (Poetry) - 4/13/2003 5:22:45 PM
This is one of your greater poems, so dark and tragic.
Where Did I Go? (Poetry) - 4/12/2003 8:28:19 PM
Excellent and dark, I rather liked this one,
Where Did I Go? (Poetry) - 4/12/2003 8:12:05 PM
Drugs will do that....well done.
Forgotten (Poetry) - 4/8/2003 3:32:34 PM
Ecdllent reading of despair and the confusion abuse brings. One thing about hitting bottom. The first rung upward is closer.
Love and peace,
Forgotten (Poetry) - 4/8/2003 2:24:03 PM
Well young man, get back to the program. [smiles] This is very good, BTW. Glad I stopped by.
Shades of Grey (Poetry) - 3/31/2003 3:23:46 PM
Wonderful write Tim. 1st stanza really hooked me.
A hatred for love (Poetry) - 3/30/2003 7:19:07 PM
Oh wow. I've been trying to write a poem that expresses how I feel about this guy (whose name shall not be given. lol) and I just cant. But look, you did it for me! PERFECTLY TOO! lol I love the hell out of poem its great. Keep writing!!!
"Stop me cuz I'm falling into your eyes again... If I could fall into you, would you catch me? Would you love me? Would you hate my love too?"
Those lines are so perfect for what Im going through right now I felt like crying. Yes crying (as embaressing as that is). And if you knew me you would know that it takes alot to make me cry. God Bless. Keep writing. :)
Shades of Grey (Poetry) - 3/26/2003 8:10:22 AM
Tim More wonderful work. As always you reach to the very heart of the matter, and expose it for what it is.
Shades of Grey (Poetry) - 3/23/2003 6:07:00 PM
life can be grey at times... but there's much color to be seen when we look for it... seek poet, seek...
Shades of Grey (Poetry) - 3/23/2003 11:50:51 AM
Tim I loved this poem...for me a boring day would be my pleasure..you know..time to stop and smell the roses...too busy sometimes with life...make it work for you...like this poem..great work..floria
Shades of Grey (Poetry) - 3/23/2003 9:28:37 AM
Ah, such a moving poem, This was sad and rather lovely,
How Simple (Poetry) - 3/7/2003 11:14:23 AM
"my tattered wings..." beautiful imagery. yeah authorsden should have audio capability for poems put to music
How Simple (Poetry) - 3/6/2003 3:59:00 PM
not bad, i just didn't go for some of yoour word choices but that's just my style. good job.
How Simple (Poetry) - 3/6/2003 11:29:54 AM
great writing! Your point is blunt, and I would like it if you would check out my teen writing section, it is a great way to be published and heard. here is the url
A Lonely Sort of Morning (Poetry) - 3/5/2003 8:55:36 AM
Refreshing change of style for you. Once again you have proven your talent to write whatever you set your mind to. good work.
Thin Flow (Poetry) - 3/5/2003 8:48:17 AM
We as humans are fated to repeat mistakes until we finally have gained enough wisdom to learn the lesson that they were there to teach us. Now the lesson learned we move along to the next mistake. Great write
How Simple (Poetry) - 3/5/2003 8:44:52 AM
Funny how the relationships that are to bring such great joy to our lives can so complicate them. Hang in there it will get easier.
How Simple (Poetry) - 3/5/2003 7:01:19 AM
Timothy, this is a powerful poem. Building from a simple position to now what has become a very complex relationship. Now you are where others like myself have gone;
to an area that changes our lives; leaving scars and teaching us what it means to love.
How Simple (Poetry) - 3/4/2003 11:36:24 PM
as we rejuvenate ourselves everything falls in place... great tone of voice and powerful motif...
A Lonely Sort of Morning (Poetry) - 3/1/2003 11:15:02 PM
I do believe this be your best one yet. I'd like to hear it when/if you turn this into a song. Keep writin em like this and in a few years, you'll have an album's worth. Go you!
A Lonely Sort of Morning (Poetry) - 3/1/2003 8:31:06 PM
i think it'd make a great song. it's great, personal but we can all relate
A Lonely Sort of Morning (Poetry) - 3/1/2003 11:01:13 AM
Tim it has the quality of a song, and at first that is what I thought it was. Could be a song has movement in it. What do you think? Your day did seem so bad. They can't all be like this I hope. We usualy ..
in writing songs ... write what we feel...
and I am criticized a lot for writng sad songs, they seem to want happy songs. I guess everyone can write a sad song. Bill Murray
A Lonely Sort of Morning (Poetry) - 3/1/2003 10:46:45 AM
I think it would be wonderful set to music, Tim!! That's how I read it, liltingly and with a great beat! :)
A Lonely Sort of Morning (Poetry) - 3/1/2003 8:27:16 AM
A Lonely Sort of Morning (Poetry) - 3/1/2003 6:19:36 AM
Good song! Yes, Not bad at all!
Sandie Angel :o)
Number 101 (Poetry) - 2/22/2003 9:17:57 PM
Timothy it is really nice to look back and see how far your mind has travelled from the very beginning. Bill
Number 101 (Poetry) - 2/22/2003 7:20:35 PM
Congradulations, just think look at all your memories.
Number 101 (Poetry) - 2/22/2003 5:29:50 PM
Number 101 (Poetry) - 2/22/2003 1:38:23 PM
I agree with Lori, its also so nice to go back and review the emotions that have driven your life. Nice 101 may you have 101 more!
Number 101 (Poetry) - 2/22/2003 12:03:17 PM
I live the "dried blood" line. Nice write.
Vampiric (Poetry) - 2/12/2003 7:56:09 PM
ah, the thrill of the kill ;)
Vampiric (Poetry) - 2/12/2003 3:05:15 PM
Ahhh...you have to love a vampire. Great work.
Vampiric (Poetry) - 2/12/2003 2:30:49 PM
both the first and last comments made me roll with laughter while the poem itself was definitly a dark nightmaric journey intot he world of the vampire great job on this one
Vampiric (Poetry) - 2/12/2003 2:20:14 PM
this is a chilling, awesome write! the imagery is outstanding...love your last comment LOL! (((HUGS))) and love, karla. :)
Thoughts of Flying (Poetry) - 2/10/2003 8:34:21 PM
The pleasure of a young teenage boy! I have had trouble with certain people perched outside my window. However I love your take on it.
Thoughts of Flying (Poetry) - 2/10/2003 8:25:11 PM
Freedom of flight whether in verse, as a dove or in a Nanchange Chinese warbird...it's all good. I love flying too. I'll be walking a wing and barnstorming when I'm ninety.
Thoughts of Flying (Poetry) - 2/10/2003 7:24:54 PM
no perversity just dexterity...
Thoughts of Flying (Poetry) - 2/10/2003 5:02:42 PM
As Long As It's In An Airplane!
Breifly (Poetry) - 2/7/2003 3:03:52 PM
that was so good. i've missed your cynicism
A hatred for love (Poetry) - 1/27/2003 2:43:42 PM
I hate unrequited love too.
This poem really identifies with how I feel
Breifly (Poetry) - 1/25/2003 7:46:20 PM
i can believe it... keep 'em flowing...
Breifly (Poetry) - 1/25/2003 5:46:01 PM
:::Wide Eyed::: Wow. That was... just good!
A Bit Of Inward Reflection (Poetry) - 1/19/2003 10:43:29 AM
I love this. Tim your such an amazing person. Miss ya lots. Keep holding on
Humble Pie (Poetry) - 1/14/2003 4:02:21 AM
I enjoyed this very much.
A Bit Of Inward Reflection (Poetry) - 1/14/2003 4:00:38 AM
Keep up the good work!
Humble Pie (Poetry) - 1/12/2003 1:06:13 PM
Now this... this shows us all a glimpse of some stronger, older being within you. It is the wisdom beyond your years that you seldom display... rather you cover it up for fear that someone might mock you for it. Or maybe there's some other reason you hide from us. But this I would love to see more of. Grand job Master Foley.
A Bit Of Inward Reflection (Poetry) - 1/12/2003 1:01:20 PM
I see you've let yourself grow sloppy my friend. But then I suppose that is far better than letting yourself become nonexistent. . . Is it not? You have emotion, passion, and an amazing brain, use them to your advantage and temper it... tame it... tighten it up until it's so compact that we never see the blow that knocks us on our ass. And stop growing up so fast on me.
All About Love (Poetry) - 1/5/2003 7:11:32 PM
8th stanza...who is "them?" Great job wolfboy, this is beautiful.
A Bit Of Inward Reflection (Poetry) - 1/2/2003 10:14:36 PM
Diet Coke is so 6 minutes ago, but reading this brought up all my memories that maybe I didn't want to think about again...thanks.
A Bit Of Inward Reflection (Poetry) - 1/2/2003 8:14:04 PM
HELL YEEAA-YAAH! LIFE MAY BE FUCKED....BUT THE LEAST YOU CAN DO IS BE YOURSELF!
A Bit Of Inward Reflection (Poetry) - 1/2/2003 10:44:28 AM
really enjoyed this, on many levels.
A Bit Of Inward Reflection (Poetry) - 1/2/2003 10:39:55 AM
Excellent write .. wish you would have stopped at
I'm always who I am when I want to be.
And that's the bottom line!
Erotik Poetry (Poetry) - 1/2/2003 8:02:06 AM
What an interesting feel this has. Dark yet seductive. This is perfect.
'This torturous heaven.
Is seduction hell.'
A Bit Of Inward Reflection (Poetry) - 1/2/2003 5:13:53 AM
HELL YEAH! Intense, but in an empathic manner as opposed to a patroninzing...good write!
A Bit Of Inward Reflection (Poetry) - 1/2/2003 4:03:40 AM
I weould love to be able to pick out a part of this that stands out. However all the words are so strong. This is deep and moving. Thanx
A Bit Of Inward Reflection (Poetry) - 1/2/2003 2:42:50 AM
Trippin' (Poetry) - 12/31/2002 5:08:58 AM
I'm still listenng to those rat a tat tat orgy sensations. Or is it only to feel them Tim? Bill Murray
Feeling Alone (Poetry) - 12/31/2002 4:59:10 AM
These feelings are so true. they come and go throughout our lives. Odd isn't it to be in a crowded room and somehow totally isolated. Nice write.
Trippin' (Poetry) - 12/30/2002 10:57:20 PM
You're not huh???? He he he. Don't you have the bizalls to admit it? He he he he he...........I am!
Trippin' (Poetry) - 12/30/2002 10:33:26 PM
;) biz balls?
Trippin' (Poetry) - 12/30/2002 10:00:41 PM
Interesting write Timothy..
The Best of the New Year!!!
Mon Ami Du Jour (Poetry) - 12/30/2002 10:37:22 AM
hmmm, good enough to eat, good enough to take........so tell me; sex, or murder? MOO AH HA HA HA HA!
Feeling Alone (Poetry) - 12/30/2002 10:34:24 AM
Oh yes, I do so understand this. Though you may feel alone, you'll soon be able to realize that you're not.....I hope. But never-the-less, DON"T FUCKING DO ANYTHING STUPID. Bye for now....
Feeling Alone (Poetry) - 12/29/2002 12:50:19 PM
Tim, we have all been there and I understand this. I am glad you are not going to drown in your sorrow. That would take away your respect. You are going to be strong.
Great determination. Bill Murray
Feeling Alone (Poetry) - 12/29/2002 5:12:05 AM
I understand this perfectly...
Happy New Year to you.
Feeling Alone (Poetry) - 12/29/2002 3:54:59 AM
emotionally deep & sad, superbly expressed...
Feeling Alone (Poetry) - 12/29/2002 2:56:32 AM
the lie is that feeling alone, being a solitary "i am", is abnormal. it is not. only by recognizing our aloneness can we form true relationships.
this is a good write
evocative and insightfull
Feeling Alone (Poetry) - 12/29/2002 1:24:20 AM
One can really feel these emotions to their very core. The feeling of being so alone, almost abandoned, by life...even when surrounded by people...these core feelings never seem to cease. To be able to step-back and reflect does a world of good. I don't find you lacking in the words to express yourself...you have done that very well here.
A most passionate and heartfelt write...excellent!
All These Things (Poetry) - 12/20/2002 5:01:00 AM
Only readers who have been there will understand the profoundness of this write. What a great turn to end this piece with the completion that true love brings. Great write
All These Things (Poetry) - 12/19/2002 8:49:06 PM
All these inexplicabe things ... for me at least ... brought together in your mind. Do they haves substance? Is there anyway I the reader can understand. Bill Murray
Sex (Need I explain this?) (Poetry) - 12/19/2002 4:04:01 AM
You don't have to explain a Damn thing. This is an inspired helping pf passion dipped straight from the boiling pot..GREAT
Sex (Need I explain this?) (Poetry) - 12/18/2002 10:05:14 PM
yum, yum, yum.......I can almost taste the sweat.....hmmmmm; but then again, I just ate at McDonalds so there may be some mixed tastes. This was FUCKING HOT!!!!!!!!
Sex (Need I explain this?) (Poetry) - 12/18/2002 7:22:12 PM
Wow..I envy you your talent!
Sex (Need I explain this?) (Poetry) - 12/18/2002 5:54:19 PM
you didn't need to explain, but what a wonderful job you did of it - always ready for another like this
All About Love (Poetry) - 12/17/2002 9:16:53 AM
Your talent is amazing,
Timothy. The more
your write the better
Loved this one.
All About Love (Poetry) - 12/17/2002 3:56:33 AM
Your talent is boundless. You seem to be able to write freely in any form at any time. I am green with envy of that. Drkman
All About Love (Poetry) - 12/17/2002 3:42:54 AM
This is really good!! Loved everything about this one!
All About Love (Poetry) - 12/16/2002 10:00:44 PM
do it & do it well ;)
Humble Pie (Poetry) - 12/16/2002 9:35:00 PM
A bit different than the usual....still very good! TTYL, suzie
Gasp!) Naughty Boy! (Poetry) - 12/16/2002 9:30:40 PM
I'll spank you! (lol) I agree....you must be on something really good! Your writing makes me crave............many naughty things!
All About Love (Poetry) - 12/16/2002 9:26:25 PM
I guess sweat soaked sheets are a good sign in this one.....I'd say you're healthy......judging your hot, sexy writing. (lol)
Humble Pie (Poetry) - 12/16/2002 8:04:04 AM
Tim. Wonderful write here. Grat images and thoughts. I think we all need a place to call our own humble place when we get to full of ourselves.
Humble Pie (Poetry) - 12/15/2002 7:14:44 PM
omg, it has been so long since we last talked, i must say i miss you greatly. anyways this is a wonderful poem, i love the wording and imagery. your still in my heart, lots-o-luv ~Jessi
Humble Pie (Poetry) - 12/15/2002 5:48:10 PM
thanks for the welcome back. this is written in such a different style than all your other works. i love it, it's warming.
Humble Pie (Poetry) - 12/15/2002 10:50:52 AM
There no place like home....Or somewhere that comes damn close! Enjoyed this ...ty, Dani
Correction...I'm Not Dead Yet (Poetry) - 12/12/2002 8:48:43 PM
oh! bunnies! more about bunnies! oh, and please don't die, too. loved this poem very muchfully. esoteric quality fading in option of lucidity, bueno.
Gasp!) Naughty Boy! (Poetry) - 12/10/2002 4:09:16 AM
Whatever you are on must be good. Mind sharing some of it...lol. Fun write.
Gasp!) Naughty Boy! (Poetry) - 12/9/2002 9:20:20 AM
I agree the laughter must run really deep! Gourging yourself prior to the run will help. Just do it the old style way ... like they did it in the 80's or was it the 70's.
No one really remembers unless they are doing the streaking. So you will become one of one in a few years. Bill Murray Ha Ha.
Gasp!) Naughty Boy! (Poetry) - 12/9/2002 4:52:52 AM
It helps to drink first, then write after an hour or so, if that doesn't work then try just drinking and the hell with writing.
Correction...I'm Not Dead Yet (Poetry) - 12/7/2002 4:16:29 AM
Great write. I resemble this "I feel empty on the inside like a chocolate bunny." What a good line. Drkman
Blurred (Poetry) - 12/4/2002 6:06:08 PM
youth has its unconventional conventions...
Blurred (Poetry) - 12/3/2002 7:37:10 AM
GWARRRSSHHH--THIS is SOOOOOO Poignant!
Blurred (Poetry) - 12/3/2002 5:41:55 AM
Confusing when you're young isn't it. Just as confusing when you're old but you care less. Timoty, please stop by Linda and my joint posting about the two children who have been kidnapped by their Father who has slain his girlfriend. Linda and I both will appreciate anything you can do to help, if only a prayer to our Heavenly Father. Bill Murray
Blurred (Poetry) - 12/3/2002 4:35:21 AM
Sex and drugs are crutches but better than being immobile.
Deeper Down Than This (Poetry) - 12/3/2002 3:48:31 AM
Tim this is a truly powerful expression of pain and suffering. You are young and string and will learn to controlt he demons. Time is on yoru side. Keep the faith.
Blurred (Poetry) - 12/3/2002 3:45:13 AM
Great write and yes life is hard as hell. There are no escape routes provided.SEx and drugs are only crutches to help the mental cripples like me get around, they will never be the answer. The only thing that will set us free is learning to stand on our own and show the world who we are and Fuck Them if they don't like it.
Blurred (Poetry) - 12/2/2002 5:08:06 PM
"I can't find the doors that lead away from this place"...this line reminds me so much of myself. Sometimes life's struggles will grab a hold of you and bring you down..but you have to be STRONGER than what is eating away at you. You have to be STRONGER than the sex , the drugs. Look in your heart and find yourself...the talented author that you are and wonderful person.
Huggs from Virginia
Blurred (Poetry) - 12/2/2002 4:50:34 PM
you'll soon see the light... much clearer!
a very good write...
Phonecalls (Poetry) - 11/26/2002 4:03:36 AM
Tim Greast write you handled this well.
Phonecalls (Poetry) - 11/24/2002 8:49:37 PM
*Turns down the thermostat* Wow. Any chance I could get a live recording of this, read by the author?
Empathetic (Poetry) - 11/24/2002 7:49:49 PM
It's a really great write, the best and the truest always seems to come from loosing the grip on your mind. the feeling seem to come to the top a lot quicker. heh thats how i feel anyways.
Phonecalls (Poetry) - 11/24/2002 7:44:54 PM
Wow Timothy, good write.
" I need to feel your breath
on my throat." Very sensual!!
Where's the phone?? Smiles
Empathetic (Poetry) - 11/19/2002 4:09:05 AM
"You are a beautiful thing.
You've got the world at your feet, kid.
And you sabotage in such painful ways."
This is a great lesson that every kid as well as most adults need to learn. If we could only learn to see that we all have beauty and worth and stop destroying ourselves. Great write. Thanx for the lesson
Empathetic (Poetry) - 11/17/2002 7:19:11 AM
unfortunately, there's little you can do...
Empathetic (Poetry) - 11/17/2002 5:21:15 AM
Highly empathetic without crossing into bathos. Well done.
Empathetic (Poetry) - 11/16/2002 11:26:14 PM
And what an enriched friend to have you care so deeply. But sometimes it’s like….you can lead a horse to water…but you can’t make it drink.
Sometimes it’s “hey Kid ya gotta learn the hard way” As much as we’d like we can’t take the falls for them. I've been there too, Had a picture painted for me...yet till I was ready to fill in the blanks...I was never going to see it.
Heartfelt write….Ty, Dani
Randomisity, continuation on a series. (Poetry) - 11/13/2002 8:13:13 PM
very good. maybe its me or your muse seems extremely provocative in this poem. Jen
Randomisity, continuation on a series. (Poetry) - 11/13/2002 4:10:52 AM
Another great installment to this continuing thought process you are sharing with us. I really like the lines below.
"I talk too much to make no sense.
But break up these letters and drink out my disease"
How true for me that as a writer I am guilty of talking too much and spilling out a form of psycho babble, mental mush if you will.
Randomisity, continuation on a series. (Poetry) - 11/12/2002 8:53:17 PM
Sounds like when you're in High School?
Randomisity, continuation on a series. (Poetry) - 11/12/2002 5:30:13 PM
This was probably more productive than my knowledge that there were 42,672 holes in the acoustic tiles of the ceiling in Geometry.
Randomisity, continuation on a series. (Poetry) - 11/12/2002 4:18:59 PM
Shhhhh!..... I don't write poetry in class, but I write it at work.....sometimes!...
Sandie Angel :o) / May Lu $*_*$
Randomisity, continuation on a series. (Poetry) - 11/12/2002 4:03:22 PM
Yeah I'm with you...very cool writing indeed. I used to write poetry during class too.
Wicked Tasty (Poetry) - 11/12/2002 3:51:34 AM
Nice write. Interesting feel to this one.
Freedom! (Poetry) - 11/11/2002 4:08:00 PM
yum a poem from and about the soul. good job. -Jen
Wicked Tasty (Poetry) - 11/10/2002 8:26:06 PM
this one has a sweet bite to it 10+++
Wicked Tasty (Poetry) - 11/10/2002 6:02:24 PM
Let the ladie rave on. Bill
Wicked Tasty (Poetry) - 11/10/2002 10:59:46 AM
Wicked Tasty (Poetry) - 11/10/2002 10:37:28 AM
Hhhhhmmmm.....yummy!....yummy!....Oh that wickity taste!!!!!
Sandie Angel :o) / May Lu $*_*$
Wicked Tasty (Poetry) - 11/10/2002 10:27:22 AM
Let her taste all she wants.:)
Put Your Hands...(Masculine Erotica) (Poetry) - 11/8/2002 10:55:28 PM
Ohhh you should write more poems like this!
Freedom! (Poetry) - 11/8/2002 6:37:42 AM
lamo....loved this..you so remind me of me.........I am always away in the clouds......*cough cough* but different gender different age of course.
Freedom! (Poetry) - 11/8/2002 4:58:16 AM
Wonderful write Tim. Whimsical littel fantasy trip that sparkles with a new found hope that looks good on you. Drkman
Freedom! (Poetry) - 11/8/2002 4:25:03 AM
The journey of the mind can take us to places undefind. Good write.
Freedom! (Poetry) - 11/8/2002 2:29:27 AM
Sometimes that is by far the best place to be. Lost in your head. Bill
Freedom! (Poetry) - 11/7/2002 6:28:44 PM
Come Back Around (Poetry) - 11/2/2002 5:51:51 PM
mopey teen poetry is the best kind of poetry (in the mind of a teen anyways). -Jen
Put Your Hands...(Masculine Erotica) (Poetry) - 11/1/2002 8:45:31 AM
so nice! great job, timothy! love, your friend, karen lynn. (((HUGS))) :)
Put Your Hands...(Masculine Erotica) (Poetry) - 11/1/2002 7:12:30 AM
Didn't mean a thign about the party just I agree with Tracie you are young ands there is going to be plenty of time for sensual and those theing later.. You enjoy your youth know for once it is gone that is it.. very good write.. yet have some fun stay young..
Put Your Hands...(Masculine Erotica) (Poetry) - 11/1/2002 7:09:00 AM
Put Your Hands...(Masculine Erotica) (Poetry) - 11/1/2002 4:46:54 AM
This is very good. Great sensual feel. Wonder who the lucky partner is?? I really enjoyed this but I do thing you have some other great erotic writes. Thanx for sharing this one. Drkman
Put Your Hands...(Masculine Erotica) (Poetry) - 11/1/2002 4:09:13 AM
Well I wasnt going to read this because of your age. (Yes, I honest. My son is your age.) But this took me back to those new founded feelings, the ones you feared but yet could not resist. I watched most of my friends make major mistakes, spent hours talking about the after math, you know, when they found them selfs pregnent in an abortion clinic or a single mother at 16.
Your write was good and showed the emotions of how desires can torment even the youth.
Put Your Hands...(Masculine Erotica) (Poetry) - 11/1/2002 3:30:57 AM
When you write what they want to hear they will come. Bill
Put Your Hands...(Masculine Erotica) (Poetry) - 10/31/2002 8:18:57 PM
Okay. I'm going to put ny hands together and applaud you.
Put Your Hands...(Masculine Erotica) (Poetry) - 10/31/2002 7:35:34 PM
yes very nice! :)
Put Your Hands...(Masculine Erotica) (Poetry) - 10/31/2002 7:18:36 PM
Put Your Hands...(Masculine Erotica) (Poetry) - 10/31/2002 7:13:43 PM
Wow Timothy...you sure know
how to write them. This one
Put Your Hands...(Masculine Erotica) (Poetry) - 10/31/2002 6:34:46 PM
Yes this is sensual and very good... I liked it..
hmmmm do you have any party's tonight????
A hatred for love (Poetry) - 10/31/2002 4:46:23 PM
that's a really nice poem. I think i feel like that sometimes. Keep writing. It's great.
Randomisity...free with purchase of a meal (Poetry) - 10/30/2002 4:53:09 AM
This took me back to times I would rather forget, but find myself visiting there often. Good write!
Randomisity...free with purchase of a meal (Poetry) - 10/30/2002 3:53:24 AM
Tim, in the passage below you may well have found the meaning of being 15. At the very least the definition of it. This passage is brilliant.
"I find myself alone in the empty shaallow graves I've dug.
Dying along with me.
But I'm not.
Can I deceive it that long?
No invincibility really.
Though being 15 is much the same.
And I never knew why.
But I wasn't supposed to."
By the way you are beautiful on the inside. Excellent write.
Come Back Around (Poetry) - 10/27/2002 5:35:08 AM
Nice write. Your teen angst is really showing. Keep your head up and remember what Noat Kng Cole said,
"Remember anyone can dream,
and nothings bad as it may seem".
Come Back Around (Poetry) - 10/26/2002 8:16:58 PM
. Least You are Trying To Think about SomethingBesides Nothing,i.e. Go In To Silence and Listen & It Will Come To You To Right (Write) With out Thinking . All!!
Come Back Around (Poetry) - 10/26/2002 5:51:45 PM
Emotional write, Tim. Hope things
get better for you..I feel from
your poetry you have had a great loss.
Hang in there...don't get discouraged.
My Feet (The story of self-redemption) (Poetry) - 10/26/2002 3:35:36 PM
The first stanza is ingenious.
A hatred for love (Poetry) - 10/25/2002 11:00:07 PM
thats exactley what im feeling lately!this is such a good poem!keep writing an ill keep reading!talk to me sometime.
I'm Confused Suddenly... (Poetry) - 10/25/2002 4:53:40 PM
Yes you are in a spin. Don't worry it will never end. You can't really understand a woman.
I'm Confused Suddenly... (Poetry) - 10/25/2002 3:53:00 PM
Great heartfelt write, Tim.
Emotions in turmoil here.
Try to see the sunshine in
every day ... and smile.
I'm Confused Suddenly... (Poetry) - 10/25/2002 9:41:59 AM
Nice heartfelt write. Confusion is a powerful force. The mind will always see the worst. Give things time to even out. They may not be as bad as you percieve them.
I'm Confused Suddenly... (Poetry) - 10/25/2002 9:37:12 AM
So What Should I Do? (Poetry) - 10/24/2002 9:52:26 AM
This sounds like the perfect song, wonder if it will be a ballard or rock style.
So What Should I Do? (Poetry) - 10/24/2002 6:24:29 AM
So What Should I Do? (Poetry) - 10/24/2002 3:53:34 AM
As always a write full of your unique insight and power. This has a great pace and I do like the loose rhyme. It ads some character but the poem isn't dependent on it.
So What Should I Do? (Poetry) - 10/24/2002 12:21:10 AM
I liked the way you did this. Bill
So What Should I Do? (Poetry) - 10/23/2002 8:49:54 PM
Tim, this is a powerful,
intense write! Alot of
emotions coming through
So What Should I Do? (Poetry) - 10/23/2002 7:10:03 PM
nice rhythm & flow...love the phrase "crimson hood"
Tear yourselves... (Poetry) - 10/22/2002 3:46:14 AM
Wonderful write as always. I wonder though if one were to rule over this rag dall world, what would he really have power over.
This is a ver thought provoking piece. Loved it.
Tear yourselves... (Poetry) - 10/22/2002 12:33:57 AM
Rag dolls, rag dolls, destined to be our masters. We of mindless journeys into strife and war. Bill
Tear yourselves... (Poetry) - 10/21/2002 11:19:13 PM
As Humanity Is But a Rag Doll Slowly Deteriorating, Falling Apart, Most Human Beings Have (Live In a Vacuum)Holes In Their (Hearts)Heads,i.e. Duly, Truly, Foolishly, Tearing Themselves Apart!
Tear yourselves... (Poetry) - 10/21/2002 10:31:01 PM
LOVED this Timothy!